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by Billy
27 Jan 2021, 04:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Modern Pharmacopeia
Replies: 2
Views: 62

Re: Modern Pharmacopeia

You added that 4S since my first read and it improved the poem.
by Billy
27 Jan 2021, 04:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Grater
Replies: 3
Views: 60

Grater

Grater There wasn't no warnin', just a slap 'cross the face, but I learnt ta feel it comin' the way I knew a wiseacre was starin' at me in a public place, thinkin' hateful about me. I went on cuz I knew two wrongs didn't make no right, so that's what I done, hands clenched in my pockets, mama in my...
by Billy
25 Jan 2021, 19:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Frozen Pipes
Replies: 9
Views: 241

Re: Frozen Pipes

Yes,I wrote a very good poem for shock value. That’s the usual response. I’m glad you clarified.
by Billy
24 Jan 2021, 21:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Frozen Pipes
Replies: 9
Views: 241

Re: Frozen Pipes

Kenneth not sure what you mean by a stretch.
by Billy
24 Jan 2021, 21:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: where the beast lives
Replies: 3
Views: 219

Re: where the beast lives

Thanks Kenneth, Bob

I think if one can write a poem like this it is actually positive, one has seen it and lived through it and readers recognize where you were and you’ve written about.
by Billy
23 Jan 2021, 20:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Frozen Pipes
Replies: 9
Views: 241

Re: Frozen Pipes

Thanks Bob, I wrote this many years ago. I think it’s good but when I’ve posted it before I mostly got no response or negative response. Could be the subject matter.
by Billy
22 Jan 2021, 21:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Frozen Pipes
Replies: 9
Views: 241

Frozen Pipes

Frozen Pipes He’s a young rowdy, half my age, married to a 5 foot 2 inch dent in my character. He likes me, might offer me his wife if I ask. He needs my help to thaw out the pipes. My job is to wait in the bathroom while he crawls under the house to heat them with a propane torch. I’m to yell when...
by Billy
22 Jan 2021, 21:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sleepy
Replies: 4
Views: 213

Re: Sleepy

Love merde, my mother in law used to say it all the time and I had a couple of Brazilian women friends. Yes, and a great revealer of the psyche.
by Billy
22 Jan 2021, 21:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Love After Sixty Five
Replies: 5
Views: 259

Re: Love After Sixty Five

I really like this poem. I’m not sure about the final lines. They don’t hit me like the rest of the poem. They feel over done. I’d like something more real. Just my thoughts which are worth 4 cents with inflation.
by Billy
21 Jan 2021, 07:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: where the beast lives
Replies: 3
Views: 219

where the beast lives

where the beast lives been pushing a stone up a hill living inside the ribs of a whale digging a hole to china drinking the empty half of the glass eating the crumbs of my ego off the floor of my low self-esteem dark clouds rain hail the size of mole hills on my cancelled parade the skip of my hear...
by Billy
18 Jan 2021, 20:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Thought To Lie With You
Replies: 2
Views: 243

I Thought To Lie With You

I Thought To Lie With You We've known each other for too long. I can't look at you with lustful eyes. You succored me in the days of hammers and pliers pounding and pulling me in every direction except the one to myself. You stood in my way like a lioness guarding her cubs. I cursed you in your sle...
by Billy
16 Jan 2021, 06:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont
Replies: 7
Views: 521

Re: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont

Actually, after reading it again, I like the poem as is very much. It works well.
by Billy
16 Jan 2021, 00:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hollyhocks
Replies: 3
Views: 424

Re: Hollyhocks

Thanks Bob and Meenas, I felt this one like when you hit golf ball and know that it went where you wanted it.
by Billy
16 Jan 2021, 00:15
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Good Timings
Replies: 4
Views: 380

Re: Good Timings

The poem is interesting, but mainly because I have another culture to read about. Otherwise the poem just feels informational. I want some kind of tension or imagery or metaphor or narrative that doesn’t answer everything for me but gives me something to draw my own conclusions. I’ve been writing se...
by Billy
15 Jan 2021, 02:12
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hollyhocks
Replies: 3
Views: 424

Hollyhocks

Hollyhocks I remember beauty mixed with ugliness. Hollyhocks growing in cinders in the alley. The flowers grow hair like the hairs in an old man's ear. A totem of old men's ears on a thick stalk, a talisman of shrunken heads. Beside a rickety, rotting shed they loiter like freaks hiding from sight,...
by Billy
15 Jan 2021, 02:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mozart Dying
Replies: 5
Views: 699

Re: Mozart Dying

I like the ending. And I think the poem is pretty much good as is. This really hit me: his limbs swollen/like a body too long in a river.
by Billy
15 Jan 2021, 02:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Road I Never Cross
Replies: 4
Views: 473

Re: Road I Never Cross

I believe the rhymes work better in this poem than in your rewrite of Kaliuga. Still, the rhyming gets awfully overblown as in the final stanza.
by Billy
15 Jan 2021, 02:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont
Replies: 7
Views: 521

Re: Sipping Tea at the Fairmont

Bob, I like your love gone awry poems. Very relatable scene and N and unrequited love. I think you can crank this one up a bit. It's not done, I think.
by Billy
02 Jan 2021, 02:05
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:
Replies: 14
Views: 1271

Re: Upcoming January IBPC 2021:

Sorry, I have to decline due to conflict too. I’d rather my poem here have gone but they sent my poem at another site already.
by Billy
01 Jan 2021, 21:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Would I want to know the date
Replies: 2
Views: 731

Re: Would I want to know the date

Good image responses to the question, Bob. I may write a poem on this subject. I wrote a short one a long time ago, but no where near as good as this.
by Billy
01 Jan 2021, 21:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bareback
Replies: 4
Views: 1043

Re: Bareback

Thanks Bob
by Billy
01 Jan 2021, 21:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Way Of Coyote
Replies: 6
Views: 1990

Re: The Way Of Coyote

Bob, Siva, Meena
by Billy
24 Dec 2020, 08:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Bareback
Replies: 4
Views: 1043

Re: Bareback

Thanks Ken
by Billy
24 Dec 2020, 08:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Hag
Replies: 6
Views: 1121

Re: The Hag

Thanks Ken
by Billy
22 Dec 2020, 20:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Hag
Replies: 6
Views: 1121

Re: The Hag

Thanks Bob, Michael.

I will consider your suggestion Michael. I was thinking the way to hell is broad, to heaven narrow. So size of gap is big.