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by Chris
01 Jun 2015, 13:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "out of the blues w/ B.B. King"
Replies: 1
Views: 5228

Re: "out of the blues w/ B.B. King"

Hi Michael,

I like this arrangement. I can almost feel the rhythm of B.B. King looping his guitar to accommodate the add-on words.

Thanks for posting,

Chris
by Chris
22 May 2015, 10:05
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed for work-shopping
Replies: 3
Views: 8621

Re: Removed for work-shopping

Frank, as promised a couple of days ago, I've removed this poem for posting elsewhere, where appropriate bodywork
and a complete engine overhaul, may restore the vehicle to a roadworthy State.

Thanks for your kind words, I much appreciated the discourse.

Chris
by Chris
20 May 2015, 10:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed for work-shopping
Replies: 3
Views: 8621

Re: Head-On Collision...

Hi Michael,

Thanks, I'll take that as a compliment. :)

Kind regards,

Chris
by Chris
19 May 2015, 10:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 13
Views: 22874

Re: Signing On

Hi Frank, It's true what you say about the Dutch, and the Welsh for that matter, but to a certain extent, this is precisely my point. The events which brought about the Boer War are in the past, as are the atrocious abuses of human rights brought about in South Africa under the Apartheid regime, and...
by Chris
18 May 2015, 22:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed for work-shopping
Replies: 3
Views: 8621

Removed for work-shopping

Removed for work-shopping.
by Chris
18 May 2015, 22:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 13
Views: 22874

Re: Signing On

Hi Frank, I do appreciate that Americans would see history, and their assimilation of British culture very differently to that of the Scots, Irish, Welsh or even the English. In a not altogether dissimilar way, as South Africans, we suffered the Boer War under colonialism, which provides us historic...
by Chris
10 May 2015, 11:26
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 2
Views: 7600

Re: Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie

Hi Frank, This is a fine tribute and a chilling reminder, to the ongoing violence still taking place in Northern Nigeria between Christians and Muslims. My heart goes out to all those innocent women, children, and bystanders being slaughtered in mindless terrorist attacks. It's quite sickening to th...
by Chris
10 May 2015, 11:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 13
Views: 22874

Re: Signing On

Hi Frank, I agree with you, that we create from what God has given us, from that which exists in its own right, and not as we would like to see it. I keep thinking of technology in this context. It's as if the Industrial Revolution freed the common denominator in Mankind, allowing greater self-actua...
by Chris
09 May 2015, 18:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 13
Views: 22874

Re: Signing On

Ah, I think I get some of it now Frank. My brother-in-law's a Fitter & Turner, a master craftsman, capable of top class work, and as a result, is always being head-hunted within the engineering industry. He often refers to Micrometers, lathes and milling machines, on which he's able to turn out exce...
by Chris
09 May 2015, 15:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 13
Views: 22874

Re: Signing On

Hi Frank, I've been undergoing a prolonged dry spell in writing for some years now, and have written nothing recently, other than re-looking at some of my earlier poems and seeing whether there remained any merit in revising. The last poem I posted here, "Revisiting Greenly Park", represented such a...
by Chris
08 May 2015, 21:31
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 13
Views: 22874

Re: Signing On

Hi Frank, Before commenting on your poem, I did google to find out what a ball pean hammer is, and I found that it's use was appropriate in this context. I've empathy for your ideas about the material world and all that it entails. It's as if technology and its financial rewards are now leading huma...
by Chris
08 May 2015, 11:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Removed
Replies: 13
Views: 22874

Re: Signing On

Hi Frank, This was a good poem for me to wake up to this morning over a cup of coffee... you had me hooked by S2 with the scrambled egg hat. The poem seems to contain all the elements of a successful recipe. Thanks for posting, Chris PS. Incidentally, this poem reminded me of a news report earlier t...
by Chris
26 Apr 2015, 18:17
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisiting Greenly Park
Replies: 6
Views: 12708

Re: Revisiting Greenly Park

Hi Frank,

Thanks for taking another look at this.

I've followed your suggestions regarding the final stanza, with an added modification,
that also highlights the importance of time in this narrator's life-cycle.

I appreciate your help.

Chris
by Chris
25 Apr 2015, 21:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisiting Greenly Park
Replies: 6
Views: 12708

Re: Revisiting Greenly Park

I made a further edit to this, by amending S6L5 to read:

I am for this evening's art exhibition.

I hope this adds some value to the poem as a whole.
by Chris
25 Apr 2015, 21:46
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "the sound of cyber-green"
Replies: 2
Views: 7767

Re: "the sound of cyber-green"

Hmmm. Not sure whether the poem's wired to Greenwich Mean Time, but where I live, Saturday evening has come and gone. So I'm thinking, that this was nothing but promises, promises... Just as well I never traded some valuable Kruger Rands for a fistful of dollars to see the show. I likely would have ...
by Chris
24 Apr 2015, 18:21
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisiting Greenly Park
Replies: 6
Views: 12708

Re: Revisiting Greenly Park

Hi Frank, Thanks for the welcome and for taking a look at this. I appreciate your suggestions and have revised the poem accordingly. I notice you found the bark carving interesting. I spent some time considering what names to insert there as most names would carry some or other reference for readers...
by Chris
23 Apr 2015, 12:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "the sound of cyber-green"
Replies: 2
Views: 7767

Re: "the sound of cyber-green"

Michael, a brilliant idea!

Count on me to be there, if the band opens with:

N'Kosi Sikeleli (Miriam Makeba, Ladysmith Black Mambazo, Paul Simon)
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MFW7845XO3g

Kind regards,

Chris
by Chris
23 Apr 2015, 12:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisiting Greenly Park
Replies: 6
Views: 12708

Re: Revisiting Greenly Park

I apologize for removing the previous post, but thought it inappropriate, and have now replaced it with an alternative poem.
by Chris
07 Apr 2015, 20:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Revisiting Greenly Park
Replies: 6
Views: 12708

Revisiting Greenly Park

Removed for further work-shopping.
by Chris
22 Feb 2013, 15:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "fraternal instinct"       (a broem)
Replies: 5
Views: 16097

Re: "fraternal instinct"       (a broem)

Consider for your work shop: there's no such word as "broem" in Afrikaans. The correct word is "besem", defined in English as: a cleaning implement for sweeping; bundle of straws or twigs attached to a long (very long) handle. In the interests of creativity http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=826HMLoiE_o