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by penumbra
02 Jun 2012, 17:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Carpathian Break - edit 1
Replies: 4
Views: 5604

Re: Holiday

Hi, Frank, I make all sorts of mistakes, always hoping they will be called by peers, so, here, I start by noting that it should be 'descended', unless it is a word I do not know. I like the image of breath decending. Then, in the same stanza, last line, do you need to capitalize 'Sunlight'? And, it ...
by penumbra
30 May 2012, 01:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: (removed)
Replies: 1
Views: 4348

Re: I Must Do This Myself

Billy,

This one seems a bit rushed, jumping from one image to another to another in a whisk. It also 'sounds' too much like many other poems I read around diverse poetry groups.

The imagery is good, as yours usually are.

pen
by penumbra
30 May 2012, 01:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "in the moog"
Replies: 7
Views: 7867

Re: "in the moog"

Michael,

Thank you for the link - I enjoyed! You are so good at those, and also at correlations, for which I am most grateful.

I smile.
pen
by penumbra
27 May 2012, 21:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "in the moog"
Replies: 7
Views: 7867

Re: "in the moog"

This is beautiful, Michael!

I have no nits to it, and I would like to see "in the moog" go forth and represent the Block before the IBPC judge.

I hope you go for it.

pen
by penumbra
27 May 2012, 20:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: uh oh
Replies: 1
Views: 4289

uh oh

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