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- 02 Jun 2012, 17:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Carpathian Break - edit 1
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12663
Re: Holiday
Hi, Frank, I make all sorts of mistakes, always hoping they will be called by peers, so, here, I start by noting that it should be 'descended', unless it is a word I do not know. I like the image of breath decending. Then, in the same stanza, last line, do you need to capitalize 'Sunlight'? And, it ...
- 30 May 2012, 01:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: (removed)
- Replies: 1
- Views: 10681
Re: I Must Do This Myself
Billy,
This one seems a bit rushed, jumping from one image to another to another in a whisk. It also 'sounds' too much like many other poems I read around diverse poetry groups.
The imagery is good, as yours usually are.
pen
This one seems a bit rushed, jumping from one image to another to another in a whisk. It also 'sounds' too much like many other poems I read around diverse poetry groups.
The imagery is good, as yours usually are.
pen
- 30 May 2012, 01:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "in the moog"
- Replies: 7
- Views: 19887
Re: "in the moog"
Michael,
Thank you for the link - I enjoyed! You are so good at those, and also at correlations, for which I am most grateful.
I smile.
pen
Thank you for the link - I enjoyed! You are so good at those, and also at correlations, for which I am most grateful.
I smile.
pen
- 27 May 2012, 21:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "in the moog"
- Replies: 7
- Views: 19887
Re: "in the moog"
This is beautiful, Michael!
I have no nits to it, and I would like to see "in the moog" go forth and represent the Block before the IBPC judge.
I hope you go for it.
pen
I have no nits to it, and I would like to see "in the moog" go forth and represent the Block before the IBPC judge.
I hope you go for it.
pen
- 27 May 2012, 20:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: uh oh
- Replies: 1
- Views: 10410
uh oh
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