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by SnickleFrittes
14 Aug 2013, 09:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Talking To Myself Without Praying
Replies: 6
Views: 7275

Re: Talking To Myself Without Praying

I like the style very much. Like what was said before, it is a little quick. I would say, try to explain more to give the reader more to relate to. Remember, you're painting a picture in the readers mind. I personally believe detailed imagery and emotional content is key. But hmm very intriguing and...
by SnickleFrittes
14 Aug 2013, 09:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Human Evolution
Replies: 1
Views: 3113

Human Evolution

Nothing really ever changes. It seems like it does, but really it’s just all in the cycle. Life is good, we change lovers. We move into bigger homes. We get raises and promotions. Things seem to change. Like the cycle of the addict. When life gets worse, and we find a way to cope. Some get into drug...
by SnickleFrittes
14 Aug 2013, 09:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Better Way
Replies: 0
Views: 2560

A Better Way

we aren’t fighting because we hate each other if that were the case, we would sit in silence it is because we love each other the pain is too much to hold back so I throw her to the ground I wish i wouldn’t have there must be a better way a way that wouldn’t make me feel guilty afterward I grasp her...
by SnickleFrittes
12 Mar 2013, 07:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: SAND BETWEEN MY TOES
Replies: 3
Views: 4950

Re: SAND BETWEEN MY TOES

thank you for the critic. There are quite a few contradictions. I think Ill just throw this one out, even though i do like the feel of it.
by SnickleFrittes
12 Feb 2013, 07:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: me and her in the rain
Replies: 6
Views: 7601

Re: me and her in the rain

then you miss the point of the poem. If you have a closed mind you always will. Poetry is about freedom of expression, i will not be captive to form.

maybe try reading it?
by SnickleFrittes
05 Feb 2013, 05:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: me and her in the rain
Replies: 6
Views: 7601

me and her in the rain

rain makes puddles in the street outside of the small café as rain has been everyday this month through the large window I watch as people jump from their cabs, run fumbling their keys, trying to escape into their apartments as I sip my coffee she sits down next to me “would you be sad if I died?” “...
by SnickleFrittes
05 Feb 2013, 04:24
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: upcoming IBPC for February 2013
Replies: 12
Views: 10994

Re: upcoming IBPC for February 2013

Grand. Clay Hunsaker chunsak@live.com This is my original, unpublished work. I am not representing in the current IBPC. KILLING THE INNOCENT they say high blood pressure is the silent killer it comes in the night or at the little league baseball game unexpectedly drops you like a sac of eggs on the ...
by SnickleFrittes
04 Feb 2013, 01:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: AS THE ENGINE RUNS
Replies: 0
Views: 2800

AS THE ENGINE RUNS

you get in his car and drive to a burger bar he asks if you have a lover you say “it is complicated” you sit for a moment then you ask him the same he parks the car and as the engine runs he kisses you you aren’t sure just how you feel but you kiss him back anyway it doesn't matter to me if you kiss...
by SnickleFrittes
04 Feb 2013, 01:11
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: upcoming IBPC for February 2013
Replies: 12
Views: 10994

Re: upcoming IBPC for February 2013

I have not been on for a while. Unless it is too late, I accept.
by SnickleFrittes
04 Feb 2013, 01:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: SAND BETWEEN MY TOES
Replies: 3
Views: 4950

SAND BETWEEN MY TOES

entering Hell’s Gates I am stopped Satan grins “It is good to see you” I do not speak there is nothing to say. . . I stare down at the red sand it stares back I cannot feel the dry wind as it blows dust on an empty horizon I see men weeping they do not see me in the distance there is a mountain that...
by SnickleFrittes
10 Jan 2013, 22:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: KILLING THE INNOCENT
Replies: 3
Views: 5030

KILLING THE INNOCENT

they say
high blood pressure
is the
silent
killer

it comes
in the night
or
at the
little league
baseball game

unexpectedly
drops you
like a sac
of eggs
on the stained
pavement

you know. . .

they say
the same
about a
broken
heart
by SnickleFrittes
05 Jan 2013, 09:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: JOURNEY THROUGH SMOG
Replies: 5
Views: 6706

JOURNEY THROUGH SMOG

we sit in the cab
of a huge maroon
kenworth
semi-truck

for hours
we talk about life;
the alchohol
the women
abortion
and
money

the sun drops
behind mountains of smog. . .

then
mile after mile
as the windows freeze
in beautiful designs
we sit in silence
by SnickleFrittes
02 Jan 2013, 00:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A NEW YEAR. . .
Replies: 1
Views: 3290

A NEW YEAR. . .

the ball dropped in new York city. . . millions of people watch as the new year begins. . . they have a fresh start to be whoever they want to be but no one changes there is no new. . . only old stains being covered by see-through stretching white sheets the men wake up hungover and the women get be...

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