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by richardc
28 Jan 2013, 01:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mishegas
Replies: 2
Views: 4272

Mishegas

Generations orbit each other as they descend the worn wooden staircase; individuals then are scattered to isolated, unfathomable, destinations. Crisp uniforms, obeying blind orders, herd rags cradling bones, whose owners live the legacy within themselves. Timeworn prayers solace them on the trains w...
by richardc
28 Jan 2013, 01:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "magian"
Replies: 3
Views: 4964

Re: "magian"

Never stops giving, but may vary in quality. "The gift that is never wrapped up free from captivity of packaging." The lack of punctuation and syntax in this first stanza makes the reader (this one anyway) stumble. Maybe something like: The gift that is never wrapped, free from packaging's captivity...
by richardc
28 Jan 2013, 01:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: KILLING THE INNOCENT
Replies: 3
Views: 5043

Re: KILLING THE INNOCENT

I like the contrasts in this. "sack of eggs" and "broken heart"

"in the night" and "at the litle league game"

I'm also a sucker for "slim" poems like this that punctuate themelves.

The title leads you to believe it's about wartime - another contrast.

well done, RC

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