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by Smmrtmestos
21 Jul 2014, 09:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Judges-Final
Replies: 3
Views: 8891

Re: Judges-Final

Thanks!
by Smmrtmestos
20 Jul 2014, 10:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Judges-Final
Replies: 3
Views: 8891

Judges-Final

Judges Judge me today Judge me from yesterday Till tomorrow if I fall away From your ever fading grace Say it all Speak in codes Unfailing words that destroy But I’m not here to stay I reside on the part of life Far from this place I call it home And I make it my own Safe Far from this hate Because ...
by Smmrtmestos
20 Jul 2014, 09:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Judge
Replies: 3
Views: 11387

Re: Judge

I would like to know what this poem means to you, if anything.
by Smmrtmestos
20 Jul 2014, 09:14
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Judge
Replies: 3
Views: 11387

Re: Judge

I reworked the first part, please tell me if it is more vivid/better than before. Thanks, every time :) Judge Judge me today Judge me for yesterday And tomorrow if I fall away From your ever fading grace Say it all Speak in codes Unfailing words that destroy But I’m not here to stay I reside on the ...
by Smmrtmestos
20 Jul 2014, 08:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Turner
Replies: 6
Views: 14259

Re: The Turner

I liked this poem, it made me feel like this man was very proud of his work and found beauty in it.
Michael has some good advice though.
"^^ The antecedent of "She"? or does "she" refer to the bronze bar and its copper haze?"

Loved the ending too.
by Smmrtmestos
20 Jul 2014, 08:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Shrivelled Up Poem
Replies: 3
Views: 10017

Re: My Shrivelled Up Poem

Nice job :) very descriptive and visual, that's something I have a hard time doing. You took something lifeless in most eyes and gave it character. Very nice job.
by Smmrtmestos
20 Jul 2014, 08:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Freedom I See in Me
Replies: 7
Views: 15566

Re: The Freedom I See in Me

Thanks, that's very helpful and I will try to heed everyone's advice in the next one. Thank you one more time.
Please read a new one I wrote today called Judge, it's deep (in my eyes) but I need all the advice I can get. :)
by Smmrtmestos
20 Jul 2014, 07:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Judge
Replies: 3
Views: 11387

Judge

Judge Judge me today Judge me for yesterday And tomorrow if I fall away Kuz I’m not here to stay Far from outer space I’m Just visiting this great place But if I fade from grace Know there is a clean slate A new page for each day So I will close my eyes and pray I can awake On the other side In a di...
by Smmrtmestos
18 Jul 2014, 08:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Freedom I See in Me
Replies: 7
Views: 15566

Re: The Freedom I See in Me

Thank you for the advice, I do my best but yes they feel kind of shallow sometimes. Its really hard for me to put feelings into words. I'm only 23 so maybe if I keep getting advice and practice I can become a deeper person and maybe my work can do the same. I really appreciate the advice! Thanks aga...
by Smmrtmestos
18 Jul 2014, 00:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Freedom I See in Me
Replies: 7
Views: 15566

Re: The Freedom I See in Me

Thank you very much! :)
by Smmrtmestos
17 Jul 2014, 07:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Help Wanted!!!
Replies: 1
Views: 5653

Help Wanted!!!

I reply to posts all the time but no one ever replies back, almost never! Am I wrong to post here? All I wanna do is get someone's opinion. I try to be nice to everyone as well as be a good critic. I work like crazy so don't always have time to be here but I try whenever I can. If you're willing to ...
by Smmrtmestos
16 Jul 2014, 23:24
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Freedom I See in Me
Replies: 7
Views: 15566

The Freedom I See in Me

Hopeful to see Who I would be The future me But could it be I was made to believe The real me Was the idea of who I should be When I was young I saw it in my eyes For so long I felt so small in your sight I lost myself in a lie And I thought that’s who I should become The idea and it followed me So ...
by Smmrtmestos
13 Apr 2014, 08:01
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: all about me
Replies: 2
Views: 7973

Re: all about me

Thank you meenas17 :)
by Smmrtmestos
06 Apr 2014, 13:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Beneath
Replies: 4
Views: 10777

Re: Beneath

Check out my poem/song "all about me"/ others too and tell me what you think!! :D Thanks!
by Smmrtmestos
06 Apr 2014, 12:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Beneath
Replies: 4
Views: 10777

Re: Beneath

love the "live a thousand lives" part :D
by Smmrtmestos
06 Apr 2014, 12:08
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: all about me
Replies: 2
Views: 7973

all about me

Hopeful to see Who I would be The future me But could it be I was made to believe The real me Was the idea of who I should be When I was young I saw it in my eyes For so long I felt so small in your sight I lost myself in a lie I thought I should become Tell me who I should be Tell me what you see w...
by Smmrtmestos
02 Mar 2014, 08:26
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Best day of my life
Replies: 0
Views: 5326

Best day of my life

When I met you the first time Clueless to what you would do I gave it my all When your eyes met mine Careless I gave you my heart You took my breath away You took The best day of my life The best day of my life 1. On the roof top watching The sky fall as the stars shine Talking about life and The wa...
by Smmrtmestos
21 Feb 2014, 07:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Beneath
Replies: 4
Views: 10777

Re: Beneath

Great job! It's very deep.
by Smmrtmestos
21 Feb 2014, 06:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Road
Replies: 6
Views: 17901

Re: The Dry Dock Road

Very nice. Sounds like you've seen a lot.
by Smmrtmestos
21 Feb 2014, 06:19
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Tick Tock
Replies: 0
Views: 4952

Tick Tock

Another day gone Another minute of my life I can’t find And I can’t go back What will I do with the time I have left Tick tock goes the clock And this is my chance kuz It’s not over yet I will do my best This is my chance I see it in my heart One more time I see it in my heart now It’s a way out It’...
by Smmrtmestos
19 Feb 2014, 08:11
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Give me some advise!!
Replies: 1
Views: 6128

Re: Give me some advise!!

I Guess you're all speechless when you read my work. :mrgreen:
by Smmrtmestos
18 Feb 2014, 09:09
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Give me some advise!!
Replies: 1
Views: 6128

Give me some advise!!

Please make this the place it was meant to be and reply once in a while.
Thank you everyone.
by Smmrtmestos
18 Feb 2014, 05:27
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: What will I do with my life?
Replies: 2
Views: 7988

What will I do with my life?

Another day gone With each minute that passes by What will I do with my life And what will I find Lost in the thoughts I fall behind Looking for a love That I never find I fly above like a dove Looking for light But the day is gone I’m lost in the dark What will I find In this life With each minute ...
by Smmrtmestos
18 Feb 2014, 04:42
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Time to Rewind the Hands of Time
Replies: 0
Views: 5022

Time to Rewind the Hands of Time

I wish I could rewind The hands of time Take the seconds back And live it the way it was When you…. When you loved me For who I was That’s what I’ve been looking for My whole life Tick tock and I’m lost Reliving the memories before We were out of time I tried so hard But I found only one thing An e...
by Smmrtmestos
17 Feb 2014, 15:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Fake Streets
Replies: 2
Views: 7623

Re: Fake Streets

Thank you for responding. I'm glad I'm not the only one that feels that way about rap. My goal was to "attack" rap using rap. I try to be as unconventional as possible lol. If I may ask, why have you attempted not to respond?