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by FranktheFrank
28 Jul 2021, 17:10
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Summertime
Replies: 2
Views: 23

Summertime

Summertime
Haiku

Planes box - firs - Scots pine

monkey's puzzle - coppered beech

Forests burn to ash
by FranktheFrank
21 Jul 2021, 13:32
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Congrats Frank - featured 7/20 @ HaikUniverse
Replies: 2
Views: 256

Re: Congrats Frank - featured 7/20 @ HaikUniverse

Thank you Michael
After so many years with you in The Writer's Block
I have, possibly, gained an appreciation of mini poems
and Haikus which hitherto had been absent.
by FranktheFrank
17 Jul 2021, 20:54
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Desire
Replies: 6
Views: 486

Re: Desire

I like this sweet cameo, Bob. Suggest: [A walk through the park. Lovers entwine I am like a taxi-driver looking through a rear-view mirror approving their long kiss.] Walking through this park seeing lovers on a bench I’m like a taxi driver at a red light, smiling approvingly in his rear view mirror...
by FranktheFrank
15 Jul 2021, 00:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Portal at Fenchurch St. Station
Replies: 3
Views: 446

Portal at Fenchurch St. Station

Portal at Fenchurch St. Station “ If the antipodes exist they will see the sun in the north in the middle of the day and that they will have opposite seasons of the people living in the Northern Hemisphere.” Konungs Skuggsjá - King's Mirror c.1250 Dickensian gloom an autumn drizzle dampens the stati...
by FranktheFrank
13 Jul 2021, 00:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Loon
Replies: 9
Views: 790

Re: Loon

It is still far too wordy, Bob.
Sorry to say.
by FranktheFrank
10 Jul 2021, 13:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Loon
Replies: 9
Views: 790

Re: Loon

I like, good draft, and interesting metaphor comparing the loon's call with unrequited love. I feel you have overstated your case somewhat at the last few stanzas. Trim a little? When I hear The loon’s wail as dusk deepens my sense [of] the briefness of an Arctic summer, its call haunting like a wol...
by FranktheFrank
04 Jul 2021, 23:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: All Happen In A Day
Replies: 2
Views: 892

Re: All Happen In A Day

I get the gist of this poem Meena contrary weather. Your love of long words is apparent. Nothing wrong with long or unusual words when used sparingly. However I think the poem would flow better with direct and shorter and plainer words. How about something slightly different? The monsoon arrives wit...
by FranktheFrank
04 Jul 2021, 13:55
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Haiku Universe
Replies: 1
Views: 489

Haiku Universe

Congratulations to Michael Virga
His Haiku published by Haiku Universe.

haiku by Michael Virga

excavating
fresh rubble
with stethoscopes
searching for sounds
of life
by FranktheFrank
03 Jul 2021, 00:06
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2021:
Replies: 12
Views: 1145

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2021:

This is my unpublished poem ieuanaphhywel@aol.com Ieuan ap hywel I am not representing any other board at this time. A Sparrow Found (1917) ‘I liked to watch her sleep; she slept like a baby.’ Simone (Momone) Berteaut, Piaf, (Paris: Opera Mundi 1969). The hiss of steam from a coffee machine a gurgle...
by FranktheFrank
02 Jul 2021, 12:42
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming July IBPC 2021:
Replies: 12
Views: 1145

Re: Upcoming July IBPC 2021:

Yes, I accept Kenneth's nom for my: A Sparrow Found (1917).
by FranktheFrank
02 Jul 2021, 12:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Sparrow Found (1917) v2
Replies: 6
Views: 1939

Re: A Sparrow Found (1917) v2

Thanks guys It is always humbling to be recognised by one's peers. And of course there is something special about the block. Thanks Kenneth for the nomination, much appreciated, and of course I accept the nom. I have not been following the threads much this month as I ought, so apologies for that. I...
by FranktheFrank
30 Jun 2021, 01:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Shangri-La
Replies: 3
Views: 1045

Shangri-La

Parallel tramlines
cross on the skirt of an alp
Snow weeps in sunlight
by FranktheFrank
25 Jun 2021, 00:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Twitter-light
Replies: 4
Views: 1637

Re: Twitter-light

Bob, I find this a brilliant poem.
So many odd words that I don't know but take on trust
and used as a metaphor for bird species lost.
I am flabbergasted and am lost in the details,
not so worried about these strange words dying out
but but to lose those species is a shock.
by FranktheFrank
18 Jun 2021, 01:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Atypical
Replies: 7
Views: 2364

Re: Atypical

Meena I think it should be 'harshly' on the last strophe. Life has been harsh or Life has treated me harshly. Power of n is good, n x n x n . . . Losing the spontaneity should be : losing spontaneity, [continue the sentence] Suggestion: Losing spontaneity, I find my self overloaded, carrying a bundl...
by FranktheFrank
15 Jun 2021, 23:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: A Sparrow Found (1917) v2
Replies: 6
Views: 1939

A Sparrow Found (1917) v2

A Sparrow Found (1917) ‘I liked to watch her sleep; she slept like a baby.’ Simone (Momone) Berteaut, Piaf, (Paris: Opera Mundi 1969). Hiss of steam from a coffee machine a gurgle of absinthe into a glass rattle of coins on the counter, the swish from the apron of a serveuse A piano playing, music f...
by FranktheFrank
15 Jun 2021, 02:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Young Man
Replies: 8
Views: 2426

Re: Young Man

It is very good Bob
something we are used to from you.

1. I thought maybe:
An orderly drawing blood, addressing me as
'Young Man'
It really shone a spotlight on the vicissitudes of old age. But we're not really old, we are young at heart.

Well done.
by FranktheFrank
07 Jun 2021, 01:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Into The Depths
Replies: 4
Views: 1864

Re: Into The Depths

Wind blows strong with a roar, [suggest something like: A monsoon wind roars or a sudden gust roars through the palms] Coconuts fall on the roof, thud thud [coconuts rattle the tin roof like shrapnel at the Somme] it goes, setting the heart to pound. [it sets my heart pounding] Unusual of the Sun. I...
by FranktheFrank
03 Jun 2021, 18:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: May Day Haiku
Replies: 7
Views: 2831

Re: May Day Haiku

Thank you Mena.
by FranktheFrank
31 May 2021, 21:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: May Day Haiku
Replies: 7
Views: 2831

Re: May Day

I thought you two might like it.

My thoughts are this as a preference:
MAY DAY

Sun strong in my face
painting the fence 'Autumn Gold'.
Schatje holds the steps.

(Schaatje; Dutch for 'little darling'.)

Thanks for the Haiku site info. I will try it.
by FranktheFrank
31 May 2021, 15:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: May Day Haiku
Replies: 7
Views: 2831

May Day Haiku

Sun strong on my face I paint the fence 'Autumn Gold' Schat steadies the steps I lean into her as she supports the ladder her fragrance rises her blonde hair brushes my hand in a stroke of care of intimacy ****** Sun strong on my face I paint the fence 'Autumn Gold' Schat steadies the steps I lean i...
by FranktheFrank
29 May 2021, 16:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Pursed Lips
Replies: 8
Views: 3651

Re: Pursed Lips

Yes, the love of life comes across strongly. It is true to life, and poetry reflects life. One can see the specialised vocabulary of a health-care worker in this poem. I especially like the close She's an addict right, a gambling addict and addicted to life. She wants to grab every ounce of life lef...
by FranktheFrank
17 May 2021, 19:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Lost Suitcase
Replies: 16
Views: 6466

Re: The Lost Suitcase

Bob, you were generous in your critique of my poem and it has changed it for the better. I see you have workshopped this poem as a proper workshopping event. It has been a pleasure to see it evolve with Michael's input. Well done. I particularly like the theme, of how writers mature not to mention t...
by FranktheFrank
17 May 2021, 19:16
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "First things, first"   (after William Carlos Williams)
Replies: 1
Views: 1846

Re: "First things, first"   (after William Carlos Williams)

Haha, funny poem, Michael,
but thank you.
Nice to be back. :o)
by FranktheFrank
17 May 2021, 14:30
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Holden Relates Moby Dick to his Sister - Final Version
Replies: 7
Views: 3761

Re: Holden Caulfield's Essay on Melville’s Homeric - v3

Thanks Bob for an in-depth analysis, much appreciated.
I have done a quick re-run and added more active verbs and cut the wordiness
and taken up your suggestion of a denouement.
Hope it works.