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by BobBradshaw
11 Oct 2019, 21:02
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, Marry Me
Replies: 3
Views: 116

Re: Emily Dickinson, Marry Me

I have shortened this poem...let me know if it works better
by BobBradshaw
11 Oct 2019, 20:45
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Big House at Mambalam
Replies: 3
Views: 107

Re: The Big House at Mambalam

Lovely poem....all the way through. The details immerse me in the setting... love these lines especially....but they're all good cattle with newly-painted horns in vibrant colours wearing huge Hare Krishna beads and mock-silver anklets were made to circumambulate the wood-fired brick stove freshly-h...
by BobBradshaw
11 Oct 2019, 20:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: CopperBelt Escarpment
Replies: 1
Views: 72

Re: CopperBelt Escarpment

I like these lines best:

Avocados drop and fruit bats flop, wood smoke
wafts to me in the blue night, charcoal fires
pepper the darkness, prickles of light
by BobBradshaw
11 Oct 2019, 07:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, Marry Me
Replies: 3
Views: 116

Re: Emily Dickinson, Marry Me

Thx for your suggestions m, Ken. I like them, and will incorporate them. bob
by BobBradshaw
10 Oct 2019, 20:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Emily Dickinson, Marry Me
Replies: 3
Views: 116

Emily Dickinson, Marry Me

V3: Emily Dickinson, Marry Me    Emily, isn't my love as obvious  as an open field?  Why delay  getting married?   My heart is big  like my house, waiting for you.  Today, coming over, I saw  wild mares in the hills    moving in unison, pausing,  changing directions rapidly turning their faces away ...
by BobBradshaw
09 Oct 2019, 20:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Known As Chettys
Replies: 8
Views: 423

Re: Known As Chettys

This is terrific! I love the details, as in hundred of men, a score of teen aged boys hair closely shaven. ash smeared on the forehead, arms and body, the three lines symbolizes Saivisim Cooks, barbers, dhobis , carry the luggage in iron trunks. The men roll a fair amount of cash in a cloth,tie it a...
by BobBradshaw
09 Oct 2019, 19:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hank
Replies: 6
Views: 213

Re: Hank

Ok, I can see that....I like some of his poems...one especially
by BobBradshaw
09 Oct 2019, 08:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Hank
Replies: 6
Views: 213

Re: Hank

A fun slice of life you have here...love the jockey image....good ending
by BobBradshaw
07 Oct 2019, 00:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Known As Chettys
Replies: 8
Views: 423

Re: Known As Chettys

Your best poems have good imagery...This one could be improved with some images and details... as an exercise, try writing each stanza around an image. Just a workshop suggestion....
by BobBradshaw
06 Oct 2019, 06:03
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: New Year’s Eve
Replies: 1
Views: 282

Re: New Year’s Eve

Gorgeous poem, Billy....love the parrot image, everything actually, including that fab ending...no crits
by BobBradshaw
05 Oct 2019, 03:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Beethoven's Dark Moods
Replies: 4
Views: 299

Re: Beethoven's Dark Moods

Thanks, Ken... your endorsement means a lot
by BobBradshaw
04 Oct 2019, 09:51
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Ratio of Critiques to Poems Posted
Replies: 10
Views: 21665

Re: Ratio of Critiques to Poems Posted

Judy makes a good point.
by BobBradshaw
04 Oct 2019, 09:49
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mistaken Identity
Replies: 7
Views: 946

Re: Mistaken Identity

I really like that opening stanza...I also like the mix of full and slant rhyme...At times the poem tends too much towards the poetic, as in "autumn's breath"....I would look to change that description, and some of the lines in the 3rd stanza for the same reason. I like the closing, as everyone else...
by BobBradshaw
03 Oct 2019, 20:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Beethoven's Dark Moods
Replies: 4
Views: 299

Beethoven's Dark Moods

Beethoven's Dark Moods Why does the maestro offend you? Because he ignores you? Nearly deaf, isn't he like someone trying to pick out the cries of a distant swimmer? His rudeness also stems from illness: colic, rheumatism, dropsy, and a stomach always in upheaval. Shall I go on? We forgive the crank...
by BobBradshaw
02 Oct 2019, 23:02
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:
Replies: 15
Views: 696

Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:

I accept. Thanks, Michael and Kenneth
by BobBradshaw
30 Sep 2019, 21:00
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:
Replies: 15
Views: 696

Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:

Just in case... 1/Bob Bradshaw 2/bobbybradshw@yahoo.com 3/the poem is my original 4/and unpublished work 5/and that I haven't a poem committed to represent another board in the current IBPC. My Funeral My life savings will leave just enough cash for fireworks-- something to celebrate my passing. Oth...
by BobBradshaw
30 Sep 2019, 04:17
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:
Replies: 15
Views: 696

Re: Upcoming October IBPC 2019:

I nominate Ken’s “The Religion of Cats”, Siva’s “The Courtyard of the Big House...”, and Billy’s “Trees of Winter”.
by BobBradshaw
27 Sep 2019, 19:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mexican Songs
Replies: 7
Views: 615

Re: Mexican Songs

Diva, meenas.... thank you
by BobBradshaw
26 Sep 2019, 21:38
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mexican Songs
Replies: 7
Views: 615

Re: Spanish Songs

Ken, Billy — thx.... I will change the title
by BobBradshaw
26 Sep 2019, 21:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Courtyard of the Big House, Mambalam
Replies: 11
Views: 766

Re: The Courtyard of the Big House, Mambalam

I am with Ken on this... love the dey
by BobBradshaw
26 Sep 2019, 07:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Trees of Winter
Replies: 8
Views: 775

Re: Trees of Winter

I have really enjoyed this one, Billy. Love the imaginative imagery. Terrific work
by BobBradshaw
25 Sep 2019, 21:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Mexican Songs
Replies: 7
Views: 615

Mexican Songs

Mexican Songs Spanish music is spilling over from my neighbor's yard. Is it a sad love song? It sounds bluesy, as if it concerns a cactus sharpening her needles, one that holds grudges for decades-- like my ex. She always feels bound to stick me with some barb. These songs are about my life: the son...
by BobBradshaw
25 Sep 2019, 06:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Funeral
Replies: 13
Views: 1286

Re: My Funeral

Thx, Michael.... glad you’re still enjoying this
by BobBradshaw
23 Sep 2019, 05:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Funeral
Replies: 13
Views: 1286

Re: My Funeral

Thank you? Siva
by BobBradshaw
23 Sep 2019, 04:43
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: i love the way you say goodbye
Replies: 3
Views: 629

Re: i love the way you say goodbye

Well said....I like the subtle way you handle this

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