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by dyerfrank
14 Feb 2014, 03:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Painting (Need Reviews)
Replies: 5
Views: 5700

Re: The Painting (Need Reviews)

At first glance this poem is put togetehr well, on examining I find it contradictory and mysterious. Not mysterious in a good way but in a confusing way. Unless there is a far deeper meaning hiden from me I see no point in some of things you say. For example you say the brush squeezes your hand when...
by dyerfrank
10 Feb 2014, 01:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
Replies: 10
Views: 9768

Re: Love Lingers Long-rehashed

Thanks Smmrtmestos I have rehashed it completely, it was too loquacious, maybe trite in places. It may be an old theme, but for anyone who has loved and lost that love, for whatever reason it hurts like hell and lingers for a lifetime. I know people who are just shadows after losing someone dear, a ...
by dyerfrank
08 Feb 2014, 04:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Voice - edited for length
Replies: 1
Views: 2937

The Voice - edited for length

They sat quietly in the stone building listening to the waves crash against the cliffs below above the drone of his voice He called on God to punish the wicked He warned of hellfire and they in turn responded by thinking of Yorkshire pudding with a rich gravy covering a slice of beef Some yawned, th...
by dyerfrank
20 Jan 2014, 03:25
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
Replies: 10
Views: 9768

Re: Love Lingers Long

Uhm, thanks guys, I thought it might be too mushy for your discerning tastes. I wrote it on here in one take, then modified it at Siva's suggestion. But its been on my mind for a long time, maybe 2 years, it is a personal experience but I guess it has a universal theme. I mean it does not relate to ...
by dyerfrank
02 Jan 2014, 22:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
Replies: 10
Views: 9768

Re: Love Linger Long

Thanks for all the hard work Siva, much appreciated. Why would I be angry with you? I like your input and value it greatly.
by dyerfrank
27 Dec 2013, 14:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Absence
Replies: 7
Views: 6619

Re: Absence

Really liked, it grabbed me straight away, most interesting a deep theme a longing for something lost. I had not heard of these twigs, can it be true, can a poet invent an imaginary device that is logical and yet untrue. I would trust the poet on this, sounds fascinating.
by dyerfrank
27 Dec 2013, 14:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "The One / law of averages"
Replies: 5
Views: 6045

Re: "The One / law of averages"

A longish poem, unusual or Michael. An attempt to meet with the joyous season a mixed metaphor of sensations like Scrooge being generous and happy. Holiness themes mixed in with Bacchus undertones, a reflection on this world. Nothing changes, the old fits in with the new yet it is all the same. 'and...
by dyerfrank
27 Dec 2013, 14:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Pete's Purple Bobs
Replies: 4
Views: 5171

Re: Pete's Purple Bobs

There was a time one wold visit a place for poetry like this. A place where one could take a slash and this sort of work would keep one interested duting the amout of time it took. The old fashioned word for such places was: lavatory. Maybe in your town there are no more lavatories so you post on he...
by dyerfrank
27 Dec 2013, 00:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
Replies: 10
Views: 9768

Love Lingers Long-rehashed

Love lingers long Harbours in dark corners Thoughts return Relived and loved again Years after you left Your scent remained an indentation on your pillow. In time it faded memories brought it back to haunt Working in the garden I heard your laughter shake the withered leaves I heard you open the gat...
by dyerfrank
21 Dec 2013, 22:45
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Love Lingers Long
Replies: 0
Views: 2256

Love Lingers Long

Love lingers long springs into the mind long after you had gone I thought after you had left There would be nothing no memory or feelings a thing that just happens People come and go As I tended my garden and swept the Autumn leaves that rustled in their golden hues A cold north wind blew and drove ...
by dyerfrank
02 Dec 2013, 23:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Shining in the Light
Replies: 3
Views: 4683

Re: Shining in the Light

I like it Billy, but I feel it needs work, not keen on the two yolks in one egg, seems contrived some how. Its all in modern vernacular and there is a story there. 'Hit the bed' doesn't seem something I would say or even familiar to me. To,me of the lines are extraneousness such as 'no matter what' ...
by dyerfrank
02 Dec 2013, 23:28
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Misery of a Cold Winter
Replies: 7
Views: 7512

Re: Misery of a Cold Winter

I see you asked permission to enter this poem, that's ok with me. I just don't know the rules or the method, it is now the 2nd December. Other than that I don't think this poem is good enough for entry but you have my permission to enter it under my name.
by dyerfrank
24 Nov 2013, 17:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Cyber World
Replies: 6
Views: 6827

Re: Cyber World

Thanks Michael, i will look up that
poem.
by dyerfrank
20 Nov 2013, 03:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Misery of a Cold Winter
Replies: 7
Views: 7512

Re: Misery of a Cold Winter

Thanks Guys, I knew it was weak when I wrote it, a cliche even. Knowing what we want to say, reaching out to say it in a new eay, that the clincher.

I changed my name forgot my old password and found it impossible to get back in, what a bummer... an Americanism.
by dyerfrank
12 Nov 2013, 03:55
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Misery of a Cold Winter
Replies: 7
Views: 7512

Misery of a Cold Winter

Our legs chapped from the dripping of urine in the cold of winter walking to school in the rain meant stripping off by the radiators not willing the girls should see our thin white legs Teachers fussed around us Placing wet clothing to dry with encouraging platitudes Our parents loved us but they sl...
by dyerfrank
12 Nov 2013, 03:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Cyber World
Replies: 6
Views: 6827

Re: Cyber World

Thanks Billy,much appreciated
by dyerfrank
09 Nov 2013, 03:44
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Cruising the Thames, Nellie
Replies: 2
Views: 3859

Re: Cruising the Thames, Nellie

There is a Novella by Joseph Conrad online and others have taken it up, even a photograph on flicker. A menage of thoughts, feelings and ideas mixed up with a garbled history of the Belgium Empire in the Congo. It starts off in England, gravitates to Brussels and ends up in that great or former grea...
by dyerfrank
09 Nov 2013, 03:20
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The poem I tried to write
Replies: 4
Views: 5514

Re: The poem I tried to write

I always travel first class
by dyerfrank
09 Nov 2013, 03:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Cyber World
Replies: 6
Views: 6827

Re: Cyber World

Thanks Chrisann I appreciate the comment, welcome to the forum. Yes this is the cybr room. I have had to rergester as the defence mechanism was so strong it would not let me in as Frankdyer