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I have revised the poem some based on some wonderful suggestions sent to me by Poetema. Thx, Poetema....Michael, Poetema says that she/he hasn't been able to log on? Can you contact Poetema and help? Thanks, Michael.

1/Bob Bradshaw 2/bobbybradshw@yahoo.com 3/The poem is my original 4/and unpublished work 5/a I don't have a poem committed to represent another board in the current IBPC. Last Game of the Season Under high clouds we wave our thunder sticks. I recall biking to this stadium as a kid, the air stutterin...

Then I nominate Meenas' Kadaneri poem.

Thanks, Michael

Sorry, just getting back to you, Meenas. Thank you for your lovely review

I nominate Billy's "It'll Grow Back", Eira's "The Owl and the Blackbird" and Kenneth's "Visiting Sandburg's Homeplace"

Thank you, Ken. I would appreciate the nom.

Good poem....especially liked the second stanza

Thanks, Ken....I'll think about sending it out, and let you know....thx again

Thanks, Ken... so glad to see your remarks! A nom is appreciated; this month has a number of worthy postings.... including your Sandberg poem, Eira’s piece, Billy’s poem, Meenas’ poem... just to name some off the top of my head

v2: Last Game of the Season Under high clouds we wave our thunder sticks. I recall biking to this stadium as a kid, the air stuttering from baseball cards pinned to my spokes. When the team won it was like the clouds parting, an omen of good things to come... The game is different now. I will never ...

Sometimes more is more. I like the tone. But as a reader new to your work, I would ask who is Em? Why is she seeing a psychologist? How are Em and Ieuan related? Adding some background would help.

Michael came up with the ballet reference...thanks, Michael

A fun poem... charmed

Thank you again, Michael. Eira, Meenas, I appreciate your fondness for this.

I really like your ideas, Michael. "Partnering" for the title sounds good. I like your opening a lot...question, should it be pose en pointe or pose en pointe a la pirouette? I also find the little black dress intriguing, but can't decide if it works better or not. Thank you for your work...your ide...

v2: Partnering Dressed in tutus of sumptuous oranges, reds and pinks, the ladies pose en pointe à la pirouette as if photographers were hidden in the rushes. They promenade gracefully, like the rich at country clubs wanting to be noticed. These flamingos rest, wade, glide between appetizers of shrim...

I like many of the details, as here: Residing in a small temple in the middle of sparse vegetation where Banyan and Palmyrah trees render life but the poem would be better if you trimmed out the telling lines, and left the details to render the emotions....an example of telling: An experience quaint...

The more I read this, the more I love it. Especially the last 2 stanzas... but I like all of it except for the Gloria Patti reference. I googled but couldn’t find a Gloria Patti. I like the line about Sandburg preaching to the goats. A very strong poem...
One typo: creak s/b creek

Sorry, I don’t know how to read this... I get the satiric last line, but not the other ones.

I like this humorous take. Delightful

I have removed the radio stanza...

Kenneth, thanks much...I will consider the radio line and how to replace it.

Billy, thanks too

Kite Flying It’s kite flying I enjoy most, running with you through parks. You fly ahead as if scouting the next turn in our path while I shout your name, trying to rein you in. In a sudden sigh you fall, exasperated by my inability to keep up--whether it’s jogging or trying to follow you on flute. ...

Wonderful...what an unusual poem and approach....