Another gem! I love your writing. These lines, just stupendous:
Her fingers trace the surgical
scars as a palmist would
divine my personal history;
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- 20 Jun 2019, 20:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Michelangelo's David
- Replies: 13
- Views: 21522
- 20 Jun 2019, 04:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "getting antique" (a diptych)
- Replies: 20
- Views: 32224
Re: mid-year & will be 62 before 2020
62? You are a youngster!
- 20 Jun 2019, 04:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Traveling in Mexico
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19581
Re: Traveling in Mexico
It was a fascinating place. John the Baptist, not Jesus, was the main guy for the villagers, due to the importance of water in their agricultural community. The cross was carved to look like leaves of corn.
- 20 Jun 2019, 04:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Traveling in Mexico
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19581
Re: Traveling in Mexico
Thanks, Frank... I like “fallen” saints and I am removing Indian from Indian village
- 19 Jun 2019, 19:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Children Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
- Replies: 7
- Views: 14284
Re: Children from a Burn Ward Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
Thanks, Michael -- I have made some of your suggested revisions.
Kenneth, Siva, Frank - thank you so much for your thoughts...generous...Siva, I can't thank you enough
Kenneth, Siva, Frank - thank you so much for your thoughts...generous...Siva, I can't thank you enough
- 18 Jun 2019, 22:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Traveling in Mexico
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19581
Traveling in Mexico
Traveling In Mexico Our bus pulls into a village. As we step outside the Mayan children rush to adopt me. The children disperse as my pockets empty. I drop my last coins into a basket as we enter the village church. Christ and his fallen saints stand anonymously in the rear of the hall. They are cov...
- 18 Jun 2019, 22:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Return
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14283
Re: The Return
Many of Trump's male supporters seem to confirm that
- 18 Jun 2019, 19:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Children Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
- Replies: 7
- Views: 14284
Children Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium
Children Tour Monterey Bay Aquarium I dream of waving to my public, a blue diver nosing up to the aquarium's glass with her ruby gloves and neon tank. Slowly, as if she's too cool to be hurried, she cleans the glass with a squeegee, a tiger shark cruising behind her. Two bottlenose dolphins hover ov...
- 18 Jun 2019, 19:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Return
- Replies: 8
- Views: 14283
Re: The Return
I like this. The last 4 lines are surprising, and effective.
- 17 Jun 2019, 09:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12322
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
This is a lovely piece, as is....
- 17 Jun 2019, 09:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: M C Escher's " Drawing Hands"
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11484
Re: Mauris Cornelius Escher
Good poem...those last 3 stanzas lovely: the way my cats sleep curled, tail to nose of the other so that I can't tell where one ends and the other begins unless they rise, arch their backs and yawn. This must be what love is: The finger reaching down from The Sistine toward Adam; the faint blue arc ...
- 17 Jun 2019, 08:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Difference
- Replies: 4
- Views: 7319
Re: The Difference
And living in The Swamp which someone promised to drain.........
- 16 Jun 2019, 07:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Difference
- Replies: 4
- Views: 7319
Re: The Difference
Clever
- 14 Jun 2019, 01:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12322
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
Perhaps what has been lost is the contrast in the two worlds colliding, which you hinted at in v1. So after the Horne stanza, contrast the couple: for example, the girl’s history like Lena’s skin, almost flawless, the guy’s past a rap sheet thicker than the Gospel... or a bookie’s journal... you get...
- 13 Jun 2019, 21:03
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12322
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
The never mind and they say don’t work as well as some of the writing in the first version.... maybe replace the 3rd stanza with this from earlier? Seventeen horns and a rhythm section, Lena Horne could almost pass when back-lit. Also, “universe” ... would “world” work better, along with tweaking th...
- 13 Jun 2019, 19:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love's Arrival
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10876
Re: Love's Arrival
Thanks, Michael, for the options...best, Bob
- 12 Jun 2019, 23:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory V 2
- Replies: 9
- Views: 12322
Re: Big Band Theory V 2
Really like this... I like both versions... love this image
It's early and the joint is
quiet as a paid- off cop.
Nitpick: in the last stanza the tense changes from present to past
It's early and the joint is
quiet as a paid- off cop.
Nitpick: in the last stanza the tense changes from present to past
- 11 Jun 2019, 18:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love's Arrival
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10876
Re: Love's Arrival
Ken, Frank — thank you
- 11 Jun 2019, 06:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love's Arrival
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10876
Love's Arrival
Love's Arrival Our mothers and grandparents admired this same dusting of stars... I slip my palm into your hand. Somewhere a spaceship from an outer pocket of the universe is speeding towards us with another couple in love. Like us they will face minor problems, too. Maybe their luggage will be lost...
- 10 Jun 2019, 04:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "Newlyweds Start Life in the House of the Groom's Parents"
- Replies: 25
- Views: 40135
Re: Newly Married are Supposed to Start Their Marital Life in the Boy’s Parents’ House.
I agree... an excellent subject for a poem, and one that is handled well with gentleness and subtlety.
- 09 Jun 2019, 19:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11013
Re: Big Band Theory
It’s a good poem, Ken. Just not as powerful as some of your gems.... your bar is set so high
- 09 Jun 2019, 07:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Badge of Freedom
- Replies: 2
- Views: 7125
Re: Badge of Freedom
The last line is much better
- 07 Jun 2019, 21:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Never Forget
- Replies: 7
- Views: 13493
Re: Never Forget - V2
Thanks, Frank...I like how you have thought this out
- 07 Jun 2019, 20:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Burning Man
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8878
Re: Burning Man
Thx for the explanation....Bob
- 07 Jun 2019, 20:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Big Band Theory
- Replies: 7
- Views: 11013
Re: Big Band Theory
I like this, the reefer odor mixing with the Pomade, and especially the last stanza. My first thought when reading this was that it was a bit too generic, and maybe it is. But it is good. A keeper. What I would also like to see is a second poem that zooms in, immerses me in a specific moment. Instea...