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by BobBradshaw
19 Jan 2024, 22:19
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Archiving Colonization
Replies: 8
Views: 1681

Re: Archiving Colonization

Yes. And maybe say or hint why the bear girl intrigues the N. Something that tells us about the N’s character? Maybe describe her clothes, which show her love for India’s culture? Maybe her sense of value, her loss at having something personal stolen from her in the past? I’m just thinking off the t...
by BobBradshaw
18 Jan 2024, 21:48
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Archiving Colonization
Replies: 8
Views: 1681

Re: Archiving Colonization

Love the last 3 lines….

Do you need a comma after “locals”?

Knowing more about the N might make the poem more enjoyable.
by BobBradshaw
18 Jan 2024, 07:57
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: God Lives (version 3)
Replies: 9
Views: 1928

Re: God Lives (new ending)

Better. It works.
by BobBradshaw
17 Jan 2024, 22:59
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Replies: 5
Views: 5562

Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges

Thank you, Billy. I appreciate it.
by BobBradshaw
17 Jan 2024, 22:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: My Siberia
Replies: 8
Views: 2161

Re: My Siberia

The sense of numbing, brutal cold really comes through here. I admire your wide range of topics. Winter is handled by other poets so differently. Damn good poem.
by BobBradshaw
17 Jan 2024, 22:04
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: God Lives (version 3)
Replies: 9
Views: 1928

Re: God Lives

Nicely done. Just a nit… you don’t need “for me” in the next to last line. And I’m with Billy… the last line seems off, for some reason…I can’t tell you why. Otherwise everything works well.
by BobBradshaw
17 Jan 2024, 22:01
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: blackberry pie
Replies: 6
Views: 2114

Re: blackberry pie

Great slice of life…. Brings back the nostalgia of my youth….
by BobBradshaw
17 Jan 2024, 03:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Publication announcements
Replies: 10
Views: 2410

Re: Publication announcements

You misunderstood. You’re welcome to post about publications. I sometimes post. Ieuan does as well.
by BobBradshaw
16 Jan 2024, 23:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Chevalier de Saint-Georges
Replies: 5
Views: 5562

Re: Chevalier de Saint-Georges

Tweaked, since this poem didn't receive any comments....thx for any input
by BobBradshaw
16 Jan 2024, 23:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Rejections
Replies: 8
Views: 1897

Re: Rejections

I have revised the poem, Michael. Thx again for your help.
by BobBradshaw
16 Jan 2024, 22:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Publication announcements
Replies: 10
Views: 2410

Re: Publication announcements

If you want to, of course. Go to Writer’s Block - Where the Poets Hang, click on New Topic and post your announcement.
by BobBradshaw
16 Jan 2024, 06:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
Replies: 5
Views: 1357

Re: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie

Thanks for the explanation
by BobBradshaw
15 Jan 2024, 22:47
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie
Replies: 5
Views: 1357

Re: Sitting on a Cliff Taking a Selfie

Good poem! It’s different and it never crosses the line of either melodrama or self pity.

I like the ending, but why Millay? Wikipedia just told me she died falling down a staircase after suffering a heart attack.
by BobBradshaw
15 Jan 2024, 22:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Rejections
Replies: 8
Views: 1897

Re: Rejections

I like your suggestions, Michael. I will revise accordingly.
by BobBradshaw
15 Jan 2024, 00:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Rejections
Replies: 8
Views: 1897

Re: Rejections

Thanks, Ieuan. It’s heartbreaking to see animals mistreated, and especially intelligent ones, including ones we share a lot of DNA with. It may be that all of life is intelligent, the differences being either a matter of degree or the type of intelligence testing being done. Even forms like slime mo...
by BobBradshaw
14 Jan 2024, 22:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Rejections
Replies: 8
Views: 1897

Re: Rejections

Thanks for commenting
by BobBradshaw
14 Jan 2024, 00:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Nutritionist
Replies: 21
Views: 2699

Re: The Nutritionist

I don’t have just one favorite, but I do have a soft spot for the light hearted “On a Grasshopper and Cricket”: The poetry of earth is never dead: When all the birds are faint with the hot sun, And hide in cooling trees, a voice will run From hedge to hedge about the new-mown mead; That is the Grass...
by BobBradshaw
13 Jan 2024, 22:49
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Ieuan Published -AutumSkyPoetryDaily - In Love with Woman in her Later Years
Replies: 19
Views: 25960

Re: Ieuan - Published

I just read your poem at OpenArts… 'For Harmina In Love with a Woman in her Later Years'. It is even more beautiful than I recalled. What a loving tribute… you are blessed, my friend.
by BobBradshaw
13 Jan 2024, 22:37
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Rejections
Replies: 8
Views: 1897

Rejections

V2: Desiring this man’s art and that man’s scope, With what I most enjoy contented least; Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising, Haply I think on thee, and then my state, (Like to the lark at break of day arising From sullen earth) sings hymns at heaven’s gate; — William Shakespeare, sonnet ...
by BobBradshaw
13 Jan 2024, 22:29
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: All Heart
Replies: 5
Views: 1318

Re: All Heart

I like the honesty of this. I like the words chosen to end lines on as well. I especially love that last line
I would replace “nigh” with near.
by BobBradshaw
13 Jan 2024, 04:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke
Replies: 6
Views: 1288

Re: International Astronomical Union - Language to Inflame Politically Sensitive - Hand Wringers - Woke

Ok, I was thinking you could develop more details about the planet, the environment, the women… And as you filled in your details, emphasize active verbs. E.g. take this description: “had died out caused by a virus that attacked the placenta.” More active verbs and details might be used: e.g., to “h...