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- 13 Feb 2024, 21:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Matchmaker (small changes)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 914
Re: The Matchmaker
Caleb, since most of the comments about your poems have been from me, and since I was the only one to comment on this poem before your accusation,I take this comment of yours personally. “ I wonder if the poem was a little too gay for this board.” I will no longer comment on your poems. Others can c...
- 13 Feb 2024, 05:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Mother Writes To Her Daughter, In Europe Somewhere With Her Friends
- Replies: 7
- Views: 781
Re: A Mother Writes To Her Daughter, In Europe Somewhere With Her Friends
Do you think all mothers are like yours? Most mothers love their children, as this one does. Many women have a love and passion for gardening, and gardens are sensual. Many mothers share the beauty of gardens and the sensuality of plants, their touch, scent, colors, with their children, especially w...
- 13 Feb 2024, 05:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Matchmaker (small changes)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 914
Re: The Matchmaker
Being too gay for this board? What nonsense. This isn’t the 1950s.
- 13 Feb 2024, 01:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Mother Writes To Her Daughter, In Europe Somewhere With Her Friends
- Replies: 7
- Views: 781
A Mother Writes To Her Daughter, In Europe Somewhere With Her Friends
A Mother Writes To Her Daughter, In Europe Somewhere With Her Friends How are you? Your letters home are like flower catalogs to a gardener in winter. They don’t come often enough. I have plenty to do to distract me. Spring as always is as busy as a mother with two toddlers underfoot. Your collie Na...
- 12 Feb 2024, 23:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Matchmaker (small changes)
- Replies: 8
- Views: 914
Re: The Matchmaker
This is a fresh twist on the ever popular matchmaker theme. There is a bit of filler…”of course”, “sans serenity”. The first 3 lines aren’t needed. The last 2 lines of S1 echo the 2nd and 3rd lines anyway. The first line isn’t needed because the title tells us who she is. Having been briefed…remove ...
- 12 Feb 2024, 21:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Not Looking Forward To The Last Note
- Replies: 4
- Views: 676
Re: Not Looking Forward To The Last Note
Ah. How sweet. I love grandkids. They’re the best.
- 11 Feb 2024, 06:41
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Notice
- Replies: 2
- Views: 351
Re: Notice
Our blessings go with you, Ieuan. I’ll be glad when you’re back.
- 07 Feb 2024, 07:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: My Siberia
- Replies: 8
- Views: 2176
Re: My Siberia
This is better, both the vapor imagery and that slam of a close…”vault-like door”… the 3 heavy stresses reinforcing the image.
- 06 Feb 2024, 08:58
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
- Replies: 4
- Views: 880
Re: Of Love, Cuts and Caring
Fairly well done. It’s something that we’ve all thought and can relate to. I like your trying a different voice. I like the sneer in this: Is there a poet working at Johnson & Johnson? Or is that obvious? I wanted a stronger punch line for a close than that last line, but I don’t have a suggestion. ...
- 06 Feb 2024, 00:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Big Shot
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1076
Re: The Big Shot
Thanks
- 06 Feb 2024, 00:00
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Bob Bradshaw -Two Poems at The Lake
- Replies: 3
- Views: 687
Re: Bob Bradshaw -Two Poems at The Lake
Thanks, guys
- 03 Feb 2024, 07:04
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Goodbye
- Replies: 2
- Views: 658
Re: Goodbye
Some nice lines in this one….see my favorite ones below. The language is rather formal, but since it’s consistent I’m not faulting it… though I do dislike “I bid you”. There is a lot of warmth in this poem, especially in the next to last stanza, my favorite. Trying to hold onto water is a common sim...
- 02 Feb 2024, 06:31
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: There’s More to Love Than Meets the Eye
- Replies: 2
- Views: 692
Re: There’s More to Love Than Meets the Eye
Nicely done
- 01 Feb 2024, 22:20
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Bob Bradshaw -Two Poems at The Lake
- Replies: 3
- Views: 687
Bob Bradshaw -Two Poems at The Lake
I have 2 poems at The Lake, “Butterfly Weed” and “The Orchestra”. Check them out at https://www.thelakepoetry.co.uk/poetry/bob-bradshaw/
- 01 Feb 2024, 21:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 838
Re: DoesThat Tree With White Papery Bark Want To Be Me?
I like the imaginative language deployed in the telling of some painful memories. Good, active verbs. Another success.
- 01 Feb 2024, 21:45
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Big Shot
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1076
Re: The Big Shot
This is no fantasy. This all happened. Haydn was the most respected composer before Mozart arrived on the scene, and after he died. Nearly everyone called him the Master. Beethoven was a young man, and studied for awhile under Haydn.
- 01 Feb 2024, 08:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Big Shot
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1076
The Big Shot
The Big Shot Haydn sits primly on the side, never a hair out of place on his powdered wig. Everyone admires the Master. The old man takes to flattery like a horse to a bucket of oats! That is why he wants me to sign my scores "Ludwig, Pupil of Haydn" ....I refuse! How often has he cut our lessons sh...
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: A Dream at the Beach
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1033
Re: A Dream at the Beach
I like your edits, Billy
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:30
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dervish Dance
- Replies: 7
- Views: 1234
Re: Dervish Dance
I love this poem. Maybe it’s partly because it’s nostalgic for me. But, also, it’s cause I love the N’s voice. And I wholeheartedly agree with that last line. Another good one, Billy
- 31 Jan 2024, 22:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Beatles in India
- Replies: 2
- Views: 5625
- 29 Jan 2024, 07:06
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Reader
- Replies: 2
- Views: 787
Re: The Reader
Thanks for commenting.
- 29 Jan 2024, 06:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Changing World
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1012
Re: The Changing World
Thanks for the comment. To me it isn’t clear that it is satire. Perhaps it will be to others. Nevertheless, good flow and metrics.
- 29 Jan 2024, 00:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Reader
- Replies: 2
- Views: 787
The Reader
The Reader Sitting in the passenger's bucket seat
with her brown ringlets of hair
like Elizabeth Browning
she bent over a book. We pulled up to the drive-thru. "You want a shake or soda?
" She shook off my question. "Do you like music?" I asked,
straining like a man at his oars,
the waves kick...
- 28 Jan 2024, 23:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Changing World
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1012
Re: The Changing World
No, I didn’t read it as mocking transgender people. Quite the opposite.
Didn’t you say that you were gay? If so, why would you mock someone who is transgender?
Didn’t you say that you were gay? If so, why would you mock someone who is transgender?
- 28 Jan 2024, 03:39
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Changing World
- Replies: 6
- Views: 1012
Re: The Changing World
Very nice! I love the warmth, humor and humanity of this. Lovely flow and sonics as well. The metrics are good. Your best piece so far.
Was that a pink bow I saw in their scraggly beard?
If I see them again, I’ll give them the hug
I should have given them the first time.
Was that a pink bow I saw in their scraggly beard?
If I see them again, I’ll give them the hug
I should have given them the first time.