Bob
Some very unusual comparisons here
Where were you?
You are as slow as a day
of fasting."
Is this alright?
his neighbors
would confront him late at night,
Uncle in his underwear.
I am also not too sure of
and how groggy,
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- 17 Jun 2020, 07:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Beethoven Unhappy
- Replies: 7
- Views: 14385
- 17 Jun 2020, 07:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11260
Re: Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
Michael
I have made the necessary changes. Thank you for reading.
Siva
I have made the necessary changes. Thank you for reading.
Siva
- 17 Jun 2020, 07:11
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11260
Re: Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
Bob,
Is this how you suggested --the 'as if ' part.Otherwise, can you redo it? The bedroom and the bathroom,are the two rooms. It is ' as if marriage revolved around these two rooms only.'
Siva
Is this how you suggested --the 'as if ' part.Otherwise, can you redo it? The bedroom and the bathroom,are the two rooms. It is ' as if marriage revolved around these two rooms only.'
Siva
- 14 Jun 2020, 07:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11260
Re: Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
Bob
Thank you for suggestions to edit. I have changed all three but retained the 'nose lift' because 'face lift' sounds cliched
Thank you for suggestions to edit. I have changed all three but retained the 'nose lift' because 'face lift' sounds cliched
- 10 Jun 2020, 19:57
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
- Replies: 6
- Views: 11260
Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents
V2 Newly Wed Start Their Marriage At The House Of The Groom's Parents The Madras Terrace house was partitioned into four huge portions with no concept of attached bathrooms. A year passed, and the house received a face lift; a store room was transformed to a modern bath like one of those rooms in th...
- 10 Jun 2020, 11:13
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Heated Glass
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7777
Re: Heated Glass
I see you have reworked this.I read it line for line. You come downstairs only when I have left. is definitely showing without these telling lines You're convinced, at your age, heart and flesh can never be reshaped by someone’s touch.' and this,works Boarded, your heart has no space for a guest.
- 09 Jun 2020, 23:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Heated Glass
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7777
Re: Heated Glass
Will read in the morning,tomorrow.
- 09 Jun 2020, 10:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Grandma in a Bullet Train
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6662
Re: Granda Travels in a Bullet Train
Thanks Bob.
- 08 Jun 2020, 21:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Grandma in a Bullet Train
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6662
Grandma in a Bullet Train
V2 When Grandma was just ninety-seven she wished to travel to Varanasi by the Bullet Train. We managed to get her seated in her wheel-chair and before she had recollected the first coal engine the driver, the coal feeder and the soot in her hair, the train had blasted 400 km a hour, non- stop; Grand...
- 08 Jun 2020, 21:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Summer Unnoticed
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6713
Re: Summer Unnoticed
Thank you.It will be Online in a couple of days.
- 07 Jun 2020, 20:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Summer Unnoticed
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6713
Summer Unnoticed
My poem has now been published! Here's the link: https://medium.com/lockdown-journal-chennai/summer-unnoticed-42220c3b243d Every year I see summer way ahead in Chennai pushed to the pillow with giddiness slipping into half slumber in the AC bedroom in my corner work space with my desk-top. Every day...
- 01 Jun 2020, 20:58
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming June IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 5
- Views: 12458
Re: Upcoming June IBPC 2020:
I nominate Bob's 'For your Love'. The firefly poem.
- 01 Jun 2020, 20:55
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming June IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 5
- Views: 12458
Re: Upcoming June IBPC 2020:
"Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur' is my original,unpublished poem,and I am not submitting it elsewhere.My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com. Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur 2 tmcft water was released at Mettur Dam in summer to save the standing crops from drying up. Once when I was a chi...
- 01 Jun 2020, 10:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Walking Home After School
- Replies: 1
- Views: 5760
Walking Home After School
V1 We walked from East Fort to Manacaud carrying books like babies close to our breasts past the fort Tippu Sultan demolished but was rebuilt in a day with red and white bricks, past the local prison with rusted window grills taking care not to peep into those formidable gates. Friday’s incense waft...
- 27 May 2020, 11:48
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Poems that placed in the April IBPC 2020 (Congrats Bob)
- Replies: 2
- Views: 8869
Re: Poems that placed in the April IBPC 2020 (Congrats Bob)
Congratulations Bob and our fellow IBPC winning poets.
- 25 May 2020, 18:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ode to Olive Oil
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10537
Re: Ode to Olive Oil
Bob
The poem is ready to stand on its own.
S
The poem is ready to stand on its own.
S
- 24 May 2020, 22:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Purple Cabbage
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10442
Re: The Purple Cabbage
I will try to reword it.
- 24 May 2020, 07:00
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Purple Cabbage
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10442
Re: The Purple Cabbage
Can you name any poison salt?
- 23 May 2020, 23:22
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Purple Cabbage
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10442
The Purple Cabbage
She put the purple cabbage in the salad bowl tossed it along with lithium in the salad spinner. Now you know she had no need to use the scissors, or the shears, or even heat the skewers to finish off. Twenty minutes before her husband started she would add the lithium in the salt shaker, sprinkle th...
- 22 May 2020, 22:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: For Your Love
- Replies: 11
- Views: 18705
Re: For Your Love
So which firefly lights up,the male or female? If it is to signal the bachelors then it must be the female.
- 22 May 2020, 22:46
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7733
Re: Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
I thought this looked nice visually.
2 tmcft
2 tmcft
- 22 May 2020, 22:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7733
Re: Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
Thanks.I will edit this in broad daylight and you may go over it once again. Will come back to read your poems.I need to post in an online group at sharp midnight.
s
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- 22 May 2020, 18:02
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7733
Sunrise on the Cauvery at Pugalur
V i 2 tmcft water was released at Mettur Dam in summer to save the standing crops from drying up. Once when I was a child I have seen the water rise up to the dam, level with the bridge. I thought I was going to be submerged and dead. But the train kept going over the tracks. I have never seen water...
- 22 May 2020, 17:54
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: For Your Love
- Replies: 11
- Views: 18705
Re: For Your Love
I will google and see if fireflies light up,only in love.Is it to attract the opposite sex? I have seen porcupines shoot up their quills,like peacocks their feathers.
- 22 May 2020, 17:38
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: For Your Love
- Replies: 11
- Views: 18705
Re: For Your Love
I will google and see if fireflies light up,only in love.Is it to attract the opposite sex? I have seen porcupines shoot up their quills,like peacocks their feathers.