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by Billy
13 Aug 2017, 05:36
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Siberian Highway
Replies: 11
Views: 20683

Re: Siberian Highway

Thanks for commenting kenneth. I was more concerned with the cliche aspect of those objects, but I thought they were in keeping with a dream-like moment of a person who is not Russian or who hasn't lived there.
by Billy
12 Aug 2017, 06:32
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Learning English in Japan
Replies: 3
Views: 7939

Re: Learning English in Japan

Some beautiful images here. I like how they keep coming back to the title and learning a language.
by Billy
12 Aug 2017, 06:30
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Dusk
Replies: 5
Views: 10309

Dusk

Dusk A broken vase. Pieces swept into a corner. The serous sunset. Having to sit down, out of breath, his fingers feel for left carotid. Pulse like a night light. Peace a witness to the approaching darkness. A dog howls in the distance as if pain can be released and sleep come easy, settled in a wa...
by Billy
11 Aug 2017, 21:07
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Carpenters Son
Replies: 7
Views: 14280

Re: The Carpenters Son

Not much to change in first 3 stanzas. I like the break on "good". I like the absence image. It's the final stanza that ruins the poem. It's telling me instead of showing. A boring little philosophical summing up of what the reader should get from this poem.
by Billy
11 Aug 2017, 03:56
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Lazarus (revised)
Replies: 8
Views: 15053

Lazarus (revised)

Lazarus The house was small, few windows. The corners dark and dusty like an old mausoleum. Someone seemed to have just left each room as he entered, a sweet, acrid odor lingering. Torn and crumpled writing paper littered the floors. He unfolded and smoothed a piece as if he had picked up the wind ...
by Billy
09 Aug 2017, 05:39
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Siberian Highway
Replies: 11
Views: 20683

Re: Siberian Highway

Thanks Mark
by Billy
06 Aug 2017, 21:18
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: He loves the light
Replies: 3
Views: 7351

Re: He loves the light

Thanks Bernie, I've changed the legs line, will probably work on this some more, lengthen it.

Thanks Bob, you're right. That cunning beast must go. Working on it when I have time. Hope to have a revision later today.
by Billy
06 Aug 2017, 05:34
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: He loves the light
Replies: 3
Views: 7351

He loves the light

I removed the cunning beast part of S3L3, may make more revisions in the next few days. Thanks He loves the light in her room. A low flame that accentuates profiles, follows the edges of complex relationships, secrets rubbing a hole in every conversation. A canopy of shadows. An insufferable cloying...
by Billy
06 Aug 2017, 05:33
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Moonlit Orinthologist
Replies: 20
Views: 29308

Re: Moonlit Orinthologist

really like the narrative you've added to the initial images that were captivating. It all works well together.
by Billy
04 Aug 2017, 03:13
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Why We Do Not Return
Replies: 7
Views: 13474

Re: Why We Do Not Return

A large audience for street theatre. The main actor wears a jazzy coat. In Tamil, he weaves a story but I do not follow the thread. My family is not tolerant of my whims, so we stop watching, move further on away from the tube-lights, into the village night. I try to put meaning into the blare. My d...
by Billy
04 Aug 2017, 02:22
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Creation Sustains
Replies: 11
Views: 15768

Re: Creation Sustains

meenas maybe something like this: The kitten whimpers his half shut eyes close and open. On the highway an accident the driver's eyes lock and spread nothing left but a reflection. A flash of lightning the road ahead illuminated then blackness until morning. Just a poor example that might stimulate ...
by Billy
03 Aug 2017, 02:50
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Told Her To Send It Out
Replies: 6
Views: 11798

Re: I Told Her To Send It Out

Thanks everyone, Siva, you're right about the last line, I've taken it out.
by Billy
02 Aug 2017, 17:11
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Siberian Highway
Replies: 11
Views: 20683

Re: Siberian Highway

Thanks Bernie Bob Michael
by Billy
01 Aug 2017, 02:44
Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
Topic: Upcoming August IBPC 2017:
Replies: 9
Views: 20461

Re: Upcoming August IBPC 2017:

I'm not representing any other board, pleased to represent Block among such accomplished poets as Bernie and Bob. My poem is unpublished and my original work. Hopefully we'll get 1st, 2nd, and 3rd. Billy Howell-Sinnard bhowellsinnard@gmail.com Siberian Highway I dream of me in large, canvas- covered...
by Billy
28 Jul 2017, 07:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Siberian Highway
Replies: 11
Views: 20683

Siberian Highway

Siberian Highway I dream of me in large, canvas- covered trucks barreling through Siberia, radio blasting Cossack music. The driver laughs like a rapid river, offers me shots of vodka, cigarettes. We crash through wooden barricades, wrap ourselves in heavy fur skins. Someone's always chasing us, bu...
by Billy
27 Jul 2017, 01:53
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Sit Down, Let's Talk About Hidden Things
Replies: 2
Views: 6140

Sit Down, Let's Talk About Hidden Things

Sit Down, Let's Talk About Hidden Things At least, try. Somewhere in the lies is the truth, like grass beneath the snow. If it takes a few beers, go ahead, but you may not remember, or tomorrow, you'll call it silliness. The mirror goes a long ways back to where it no longer reflects. Let's throw o...
by Billy
27 Jul 2017, 01:52
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Air India
Replies: 10
Views: 16048

Re: Air India

Lovely accents and tones that say so much. Good poem. Nothing to change. Maybe you'll add more? I see you've turned to shorter poems.
by Billy
27 Jul 2017, 01:40
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Monarch Butterflies
Replies: 5
Views: 10057

Re: Monarch Butterflies

Just my thoughts, take or leave, nice little poem: Monarch Butterflies Each year love seems as remote as any oyamel forest. These legendary lovers set off from Canada into the air like swimmers into choppy seas. We, too, have fought turbulence with nothing but will and stamina for the chance to rest...
by Billy
24 Jul 2017, 17:23
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: revised: Orchid Lounge
Replies: 3
Views: 7043

Re: Well, Shake It Up, Baby, Now, Work It On Out*

Yeah, that line rubbed me wrong, too. I'll try to come back and rewrite the whole thing. I just felt like writing something last night and ripped it off as is in the post. No time to fix it right now, if it's fixable or if I want to fix it.
by Billy
24 Jul 2017, 06:58
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: revised: Orchid Lounge
Replies: 3
Views: 7043

revised: Orchid Lounge

revised: Orchid Lounge A sunken bar, the old songs I never forgot. 'Well, shake it up, baby, now, work it on out."* My body knew, but I didn't. I danced the twist in a white shirt, saddle shoes. My first drink an innocent sip. The adult, sawdust dance floor, the smell of perfume and alcohol. Rub of ...
by Billy
21 Jul 2017, 23:42
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: "disembark"     (poem prompted by photograph)
Replies: 6
Views: 13750

Re: "disembark"     (poem prompted by photograph)

When I read the last stanza I'm thinking this has taken on the refugee and immigration ban. Yes, no? I like first stanza much better.
by Billy
20 Jul 2017, 20:41
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Told Her To Send It Out
Replies: 6
Views: 11798

Re: I Told Her To Send It Out

I love that I have gotten such divergent responses to this poem. Thanks Bernie, I'll consider your suggestions. I've had a couple of poets like the Jesus part. I feel like I've succeeded in some way when I get conflicting responses which seems to be true of a lot of my poems. Thanks Meenas.
by Billy
13 Jul 2017, 01:09
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: I Told Her To Send It Out
Replies: 6
Views: 11798

I Told Her To Send It Out

I Told Her To Send It Out "Don't waste your time. Haven't seen anybody iron since my mother." The iron hisses, puffs of steam rise like I imagine the immaculate body of Christ left the earth, too hot for the world to touch, then no more. "I always want more. Don't you?" She smiles, ignores me, know...
by Billy
13 Jul 2017, 01:08
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: Rain Like Pizarro In Peru
Replies: 7
Views: 12801

Re: Rain Like Pizarro In Peru

Like this, Bernie, but I would end this with the next to the last stanza:

We trace some of Pizarro's path.
The children, the llamas, the stones
do not remember him.
by Billy
13 Jul 2017, 01:06
Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
Topic: The Swallows of Capistrano
Replies: 8
Views: 15324

Re: The Swallows of Capistrano

Bob, I agree with Bernie. Though I'm not sold on the end. It just doesn't seem strong enough, then again, maybe it should not be overpowering. I like the new version.