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- 14 Feb 2014, 03:40
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Painting (Need Reviews)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 13436
Re: The Painting (Need Reviews)
At first glance this poem is put togetehr well, on examining I find it contradictory and mysterious. Not mysterious in a good way but in a confusing way. Unless there is a far deeper meaning hiden from me I see no point in some of things you say. For example you say the brush squeezes your hand when...
- 10 Feb 2014, 01:48
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
- Replies: 10
- Views: 22133
Re: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
Thanks Smmrtmestos I have rehashed it completely, it was too loquacious, maybe trite in places. It may be an old theme, but for anyone who has loved and lost that love, for whatever reason it hurts like hell and lingers for a lifetime. I know people who are just shadows after losing someone dear, a ...
- 08 Feb 2014, 04:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Voice - edited for length
- Replies: 1
- Views: 6679
The Voice - edited for length
They sat quietly in the stone building listening to the waves crash against the cliffs below above the drone of his voice He called on God to punish the wicked He warned of hellfire and they in turn responded by thinking of Yorkshire pudding with a rich gravy covering a slice of beef Some yawned, th...
- 20 Jan 2014, 03:25
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
- Replies: 10
- Views: 22133
Re: Love Lingers Long
Uhm, thanks guys, I thought it might be too mushy for your discerning tastes. I wrote it on here in one take, then modified it at Siva's suggestion. But its been on my mind for a long time, maybe 2 years, it is a personal experience but I guess it has a universal theme. I mean it does not relate to ...
- 02 Jan 2014, 22:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
- Replies: 10
- Views: 22133
Re: Love Linger Long
Thanks for all the hard work Siva, much appreciated. Why would I be angry with you? I like your input and value it greatly.
- 27 Dec 2013, 14:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: TGITG (an after-byte)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 12840
- 27 Dec 2013, 14:52
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Absence
- Replies: 7
- Views: 15085
Re: Absence
Really liked, it grabbed me straight away, most interesting a deep theme a longing for something lost. I had not heard of these twigs, can it be true, can a poet invent an imaginary device that is logical and yet untrue. I would trust the poet on this, sounds fascinating.
- 27 Dec 2013, 14:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "The One / law of averages"
- Replies: 5
- Views: 13302
Re: "The One / law of averages"
A longish poem, unusual or Michael. An attempt to meet with the joyous season a mixed metaphor of sensations like Scrooge being generous and happy. Holiness themes mixed in with Bacchus undertones, a reflection on this world. Nothing changes, the old fits in with the new yet it is all the same. 'and...
- 27 Dec 2013, 14:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Pete's Purple Bobs
- Replies: 4
- Views: 11614
Re: Pete's Purple Bobs
There was a time one wold visit a place for poetry like this. A place where one could take a slash and this sort of work would keep one interested duting the amout of time it took. The old fashioned word for such places was: lavatory. Maybe in your town there are no more lavatories so you post on he...
- 27 Dec 2013, 00:53
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Love Lingers Long-rehashed
- Replies: 10
- Views: 22133
Love Lingers Long-rehashed
Love lingers long Harbours in dark corners Thoughts return Relived and loved again Years after you left Your scent remained an indentation on your pillow. In time it faded memories brought it back to haunt Working in the garden I heard your laughter shake the withered leaves I heard you open the gat...
- 21 Dec 2013, 22:45
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Love Lingers Long
- Replies: 0
- Views: 5067
Love Lingers Long
Love lingers long springs into the mind long after you had gone I thought after you had left There would be nothing no memory or feelings a thing that just happens People come and go As I tended my garden and swept the Autumn leaves that rustled in their golden hues A cold north wind blew and drove ...
- 21 Dec 2013, 21:54
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Another sucky poem with a topical question...
- Replies: 1
- Views: 6933
Re: Another sucky poem with a topical question...
Sucky indeed!
- 02 Dec 2013, 23:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Shining in the Light
- Replies: 3
- Views: 10603
Re: Shining in the Light
I like it Billy, but I feel it needs work, not keen on the two yolks in one egg, seems contrived some how. Its all in modern vernacular and there is a story there. 'Hit the bed' doesn't seem something I would say or even familiar to me. To,me of the lines are extraneousness such as 'no matter what' ...
- 02 Dec 2013, 23:28
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Misery of a Cold Winter
- Replies: 7
- Views: 17281
Re: Misery of a Cold Winter
I see you asked permission to enter this poem, that's ok with me. I just don't know the rules or the method, it is now the 2nd December. Other than that I don't think this poem is good enough for entry but you have my permission to enter it under my name.
- 24 Nov 2013, 17:29
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cyber World
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17430
Re: Cyber World
Thanks Michael, i will look up that
poem.
poem.
- 20 Nov 2013, 03:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Misery of a Cold Winter
- Replies: 7
- Views: 17281
Re: Misery of a Cold Winter
Thanks Guys, I knew it was weak when I wrote it, a cliche even. Knowing what we want to say, reaching out to say it in a new eay, that the clincher.
I changed my name forgot my old password and found it impossible to get back in, what a bummer... an Americanism.
I changed my name forgot my old password and found it impossible to get back in, what a bummer... an Americanism.
- 12 Nov 2013, 03:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Misery of a Cold Winter
- Replies: 7
- Views: 17281
Misery of a Cold Winter
Our legs chapped from the dripping of urine in the cold of winter walking to school in the rain meant stripping off by the radiators not willing the girls should see our thin white legs Teachers fussed around us Placing wet clothing to dry with encouraging platitudes Our parents loved us but they sl...
- 12 Nov 2013, 03:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cyber World
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17430
Re: Cyber World
Thanks Billy,much appreciated
- 09 Nov 2013, 03:44
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cruising the Thames, Nellie
- Replies: 2
- Views: 8853
Re: Cruising the Thames, Nellie
There is a Novella by Joseph Conrad online and others have taken it up, even a photograph on flicker. A menage of thoughts, feelings and ideas mixed up with a garbled history of the Belgium Empire in the Congo. It starts off in England, gravitates to Brussels and ends up in that great or former grea...
- 09 Nov 2013, 03:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The poem I tried to write
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12758
Re: The poem I tried to write
I always travel first class
- 09 Nov 2013, 03:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Cyber World
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17430
Re: Cyber World
Thanks Chrisann I appreciate the comment, welcome to the forum. Yes this is the cybr room. I have had to rergester as the defence mechanism was so strong it would not let me in as Frankdyer