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- 11 May 2018, 07:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Night Lowers Jet Blue Wings*
- Replies: 17
- Views: 23351
Night Lowers Jet Blue Wings*
Gang--- how can i thank you? this poem has hung around my desk much too long. your comments helped greatly to nail this more final version. for now, mastodons , but thinking hard. Rains wash across the grain carriers, the massive ships lumber a glassine sea, the occasional whistle like a woman spea...
- 11 May 2018, 06:55
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Ashlyn, Attending a Friend’s Wedding Reception, Meets a Youn
- Replies: 6
- Views: 10679
Re: Ashlyn, Attending a Friend’s Wedding Reception, Meets a
Bob--- just wonderful. I was right there, every twist and glimpse. wish the poem could find something more feminine here: like a chameleon, one moment part of a branch's lichen, like a couple at the rail of a sea borne cruiser, the way to an aperitif table. You pause, look around, beautiful oh that...
- 10 May 2018, 08:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Trying to Get Motivated Now That it's Spring
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20102
Re: Trying to Get Motivated Now That it's Spring
gang... check kate tempest... british rapping poet. bernie https://video.search.yahoo.com/yhs/search?fr=yhs-pty-pty_email&hsimp=yhs-pty_email&hspart=pty&p=kate+tempest+youtube#id=2&vid=45a6685aa4af57625f10088d920e0507&action=click https://video.search.yahoo.com/yhs/search?fr=yhs-pty-pty_email&hsimp=...
- 10 May 2018, 07:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Adjunct American Lit (final revision)
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19835
Re: Adjunct American Lit (final revision)
The Woman at the Washington Zoo Randall Jarrell The saris go by me from the embassies. Cloth from the moon. Cloth from another planet. They look back at the leopard like the leopard. And I. . . . This print of mine, that has kept its color Alive through so many cleanings; this dull null Navy I wear...
- 10 May 2018, 07:21
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Trying to Get Motivated Now That it's Spring
- Replies: 11
- Views: 20102
Re: Trying to Get Motivated Now That it's Spring
K--- high test heartbreak. i would drop the ending dream ref....for? well i'm thinking. i'd add a metal walker. a wallet penned in a pouch. an orthopedic shoe and raspy basal cough, ubiquitous telephone holster strung on a worn brown belt. faded green tattoo of Singapore and Port Royal. really dig t...
- 02 May 2018, 23:13
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming May IBPC 2018:
- Replies: 13
- Views: 27043
Re: Upcoming May IBPC 2018:
Thanks for the nom. Bernard Henrie mojave216bernard@aol.com 1. my original work 2. not representing any other Forum 3. unpublished 4. hard copy follows Alien Sedition Guests dodge the withering rain, pack the church, cough and stamp. A bridesmaid, then two more, mixed ages, breasts at the neckline n...
- 01 May 2018, 03:49
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Gentle Clapping Found Erased in a Wood - V3
- Replies: 11
- Views: 18353
Re: A30-Erased Clapping Found in a Wood
Frank----
great find, but most of all how to present this scene in a modern context. rich, touching and memorable. great job.
bernie
great find, but most of all how to present this scene in a modern context. rich, touching and memorable. great job.
bernie
- 29 Apr 2018, 02:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Letter to Emma
- Replies: 5
- Views: 10577
Re: Letter to Emma
I like this quiet discussion, the writer seems enmeshed in memories.
bernie
bernie
- 29 Apr 2018, 02:08
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Shelley's Heart
- Replies: 10
- Views: 16085
Re: Shelley's Heart
Shelley's Heart...
a third nom from me....loved the ending. the narrative flow handles a lot of detail, but does so smoothly and without interrupting the building mood.
very very nice.
bernie
a third nom from me....loved the ending. the narrative flow handles a lot of detail, but does so smoothly and without interrupting the building mood.
very very nice.
bernie
- 29 Apr 2018, 02:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Alien Sedition
- Replies: 24
- Views: 32946
Re: Alien Sedition
OH, IF ONLY WE COULD PUT ALL OUR NAMES AS AUTHOR....
IN ANY CASE, MU[CH THANKS.
BERNIE
IN ANY CASE, MU[CH THANKS.
BERNIE
- 24 Apr 2018, 06:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Adjunct American Lit (final revision)
- Replies: 12
- Views: 19835
Re: American Lit Adjunct
Dale---
enjoyed the originality of theme, the descriptions.
pondered the pronouns.
is a contrast projected in the poem the traditional, older woman vs the woman in the final image:
She turns on her cell,
scoots between desks,
her Malcom X t-shirt
worn as a dress.
excellent poem.
bernie
enjoyed the originality of theme, the descriptions.
pondered the pronouns.
is a contrast projected in the poem the traditional, older woman vs the woman in the final image:
She turns on her cell,
scoots between desks,
her Malcom X t-shirt
worn as a dress.
excellent poem.
bernie
- 24 Apr 2018, 04:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: South Florida Fashion Shoot
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9608
South Florida Fashion Shoot
Great comments, very helpful with this poem and another in the incubator. thanks. here is our IBPC judge, a comment and a pom: C. Wade Bentley : “Over the past year or so, I have several times decided to be done submitting poems, maybe even to be done writing poems. And it’s not because I’m bitter o...
- 21 Apr 2018, 11:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: South Florida Fashion Shoot
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9608
South Florida Fashion Shoot
R#1 She found sailor pants and wore them damn well, the ocean sashayed behind her with green hues and shadow. She glistened in South Florida where the heat is both eccentric and glamorous, a royal on holiday seeming to roam a private island. My wife grabbed her for photos and we sold the lot to a S...
- 20 Apr 2018, 05:37
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Spider Orchids
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8930
Re: Spider Orchids
Bob--- a joy and wonder. so original, beginning to end. one fresh, unexpected image after another. My favorite? I choose an orchid from my childhood: the great plains white fringed orchid, her tresses of snowy flowers unloosening evening perfumes (I almost blush.) the lady's slipper, her labellum s...
- 19 Apr 2018, 05:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Meeting my Father-in-law - revised
- Replies: 12
- Views: 18673
Re: Constanze - revised
Bob--- not crazy for the narrative here---it seems to move without compelling line. is there a zig zag? just asking? Version two: Constanze Hadn’t Wolfi's "Papa" made it clear that I was unwelcomed as a Mozart? must we start with less than a declarative? "hadn't....that I...." What musical talent d...
- 19 Apr 2018, 03:43
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Oklahoma (revision)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 17526
Re: Oklahoma (revision)
Dale--- shining in the red okla sun. and it isn't closing time. final revision Near old photographs of oil fields and dust bowl refugees a Rock-Ola jukebox plays Earnest Tubb. I’m drinking shots, ready to stop driving trucks, to start selling cars for my brother in East Sacramento. The bartender po...
- 16 Apr 2018, 21:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Alien Sedition
- Replies: 24
- Views: 32946
Re: Alien Sedition
Guys---
i'm no longer deep in wanton soup---not even the wonton.
smoother? great!
red envelope....now decorously placed on the gift table. i love that word here, decorous. oh yes, decorous. and that ruby colored tuxedo.
I saw all this on my travels....LOL.
thanks, one and all.
bernie
i'm no longer deep in wanton soup---not even the wonton.
smoother? great!
red envelope....now decorously placed on the gift table. i love that word here, decorous. oh yes, decorous. and that ruby colored tuxedo.
I saw all this on my travels....LOL.
thanks, one and all.
bernie
- 15 Apr 2018, 21:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Alien Sedition
- Replies: 24
- Views: 32946
Re: Alien Sedition
Guys---
thanks for holding in with this endless series of revisions.
done now.
(promise.)
bernie
thanks for holding in with this endless series of revisions.
done now.
(promise.)
bernie
- 14 Apr 2018, 20:50
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Oklahoma (revision)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 17526
Re: Oklahoma (revision)
Hank Williams and Anita Carter (1949, NBC / Kate Smith Hour sponsored by Bab-o I can't Help It If I'm Still In Love With You https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=orM1yplEltI Ernest Tubb I'm Walking the Floor Over You https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nWmbFXJDHrM Kitty Wells It Wasn't God Who Made Honky Ton...
- 14 Apr 2018, 00:09
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Oklahoma (revision)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 17526
Re: Oklahoma
Dale--- plenty going on...and all of it edged with wit and barely hidden sadness. not your intent...but you reference this at the opening...the Discobolus. a maverick part of my brain wanted to see this OK bar over laid by a Greek Taverna....the ...Cherokee maiden with masculine shoulders ...etc. p...
- 13 Apr 2018, 23:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Automobile Rescue Repairmen - Fred and Joe - V2
- Replies: 5
- Views: 9740
Re: Automobile Rescue Repairmen - Fred and Joe
Frank--- only the ten commandments are in stone. any photo....can be retouched.... I like the refrain, the ending lines....for the poem. the details of the repair, might go the way of the dodo bird. His voice percolates through from the dining room, reflects impatience, his frustration. I try to fo...
- 13 Apr 2018, 23:24
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Alien Sedition
- Replies: 24
- Views: 32946
Re: Alien Sedition
Dale:
maybe...
water chestnuts....
A bridesmaid, then two more,
mixed ages, breasts at the neckline
no bigger than water chestnuts.
thinking about the image...i don't want to signal desire----he is focused on his lost love who now marries another man.
thinking...
bernie
maybe...
water chestnuts....
A bridesmaid, then two more,
mixed ages, breasts at the neckline
no bigger than water chestnuts.
thinking about the image...i don't want to signal desire----he is focused on his lost love who now marries another man.
thinking...
bernie
- 13 Apr 2018, 23:16
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Cat Walk
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9203
Re: The Cat Walk
M--- very nice. i especially like the long whiskers. now, everything relates to a cat....to gently suggest this might be also be a certain type of man ... what can the poem say? The long whiskers twitching striped body in mixed colours yellow and black, or black and white A poor cousin of the feroc...
- 10 Apr 2018, 07:35
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Meeting my Father-in-law - revised
- Replies: 12
- Views: 18673
Re: Constanze Mozart
Bob--- can i talk you into a major revision? too many names, for one thing. interesting only because Mozart if mixed in, but not interesting because of the poem. and then, a lot of close reasoning---in flat diction, to set the poem for the wonderful final verse. alas, the poem could be about any mo...
- 08 Apr 2018, 01:47
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: To Win at all Cost
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9594