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A well worked poem and there is a balance between the first half and the second half. Reads well. Lots of nice usages and the ending is perfect.Sorry I missed this .
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- 22 May 2020, 10:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Her Heart was a Taxi Speeding Out of Town
- Replies: 1
- Views: 5448
- 22 May 2020, 09:12
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: You Kissed Me
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8917
Re: You Kissed Me
This reads well now, because of the word arrangement in the line.
- 17 May 2020, 21:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: For Your Love
- Replies: 11
- Views: 18587
Re: For Your Love
The poem works well. Do you need the last line?
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- 13 May 2020, 22:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: You Kissed Me
- Replies: 4
- Views: 8917
Re: You Kissed Me
I suppose this is a Ghazal.It reads well, Bob. So...so...Simple.
- 13 May 2020, 21:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: What Does the Crown of the Temple Hold?
- Replies: 0
- Views: 7155
What Does the Crown of the Temple Hold?
V1 V1 In twelve years, another Kumbabishekam, the idols re-installed. rituals followed to the last unwritten word the Deity removed, immersed in grain Immersed in water one mandala each The pagodas filled with millets; One pagoda for each storey and that’s how the temple is built, copper sheets brou...
- 10 May 2020, 07:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Insoiration is Taking The Other Route
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9739
- 09 May 2020, 09:33
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12578
Re: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
Thank you Michael and Bob,who made it possible with his initial editing.
Siva
Siva
- 08 May 2020, 09:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10754
Re: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
A plateau is plain level ground.There is no depth where you can fall into.Sometimes I get a jolt in my sleep as if I am falling from the bed.That is why I have said falling from the plateau which is not possible,unless you fall while standing on the ground. From a distance it is impossible to guage ...
- 07 May 2020, 21:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Insoiration is Taking The Other Route
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9739
Re: Insoiration is Taking The Other Route
Bob
V1 is the edited version.Do I have to drop the drones?
S
V1 is the edited version.Do I have to drop the drones?
S
- 05 May 2020, 23:41
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Insoiration is Taking The Other Route
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9739
Insoiration is Taking The Other Route
V1 My son is with the batallion on Punjab border this side of Pakistan. Military jeeps roll on to the next northern state from Uttar Pradesh. The military are the potential buyers of drones. My son sends video on Whatapps., insect drones whizzing twenty kilometres into three different villages dropp...
- 05 May 2020, 23:29
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12578
Re: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
'Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?' is my original,unpublished prose-poem,and I am not representing any other forum.My email id is sivakamivelliangriri@gmail.com. Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips? These past days my dreams have dropped me from the edge of Congress Maidaan. Know well that the Con...
- 05 May 2020, 22:20
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10754
Re: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
An armchair traveller, owing to the Lockdown.
- 04 May 2020, 21:18
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12578
Are we not placing three poems for the IBPC?
Michael
I am not representing any other group.
Siva Ramanathan
I am not representing any other group.
Siva Ramanathan
- 03 May 2020, 19:01
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
- Replies: 4
- Views: 10754
Will We Ever Make Our Forest Trips?
These past four days my dreams have dropped me from the edge of Congress Maidaan. Know well that the Congress Maidaan is a plateau. That lone tusker we saw once turns in a semicircle at the far end. My husband is bending down tying his shoe laces. My daughter yells, ’It is madness to get down from t...
- 23 Apr 2020, 22:39
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Poems that placed in the March IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 2
- Views: 9328
Re: Poems that placed in the March IBPC 2020:
Thank you Michael and Bob. You have been very patient and encouraged me by spending your time to edit and I am constantly learning.
- 04 Apr 2020, 14:19
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Kate—To Her Breast Implant
- Replies: 2
- Views: 7925
Re: Kate—To Her Breast Implant
Perfect!
- 01 Apr 2020, 08:52
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 7
- Views: 16903
Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
I second Michael's nomination of Bob's 'Separation.'
- 01 Apr 2020, 07:18
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
- Replies: 8
- Views: 17302
Re: Riding a Bike to Cross the Countryside.
Bob
Please read the version I have posted today in the IBPC thread.The 'Biking Cross-Country' poem.
Siva
Please read the version I have posted today in the IBPC thread.The 'Biking Cross-Country' poem.
Siva
- 01 Apr 2020, 07:12
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
- Replies: 6
- Views: 12659
Re: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
I think you ccan add these two stanzas because they bring in the persona element and by so doing validate the last line.
- 31 Mar 2020, 21:42
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 7
- Views: 16903
Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
Biking Cross- Country, is my original unpublished poem and I am not representing any other forum. My mail id is sivakamivelliangiri@gmail.com. "Biking Cross-Country" We rode past a rubber plantation where we couldn't breathe without inhaling the stench --worse than burning tyres emitting smoke pipes...
- 31 Mar 2020, 20:36
- Forum: Writer's Block Palaver
- Topic: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
- Replies: 7
- Views: 16903
Re: Upcoming April IBPC 2020:
I nominate Bob's 'Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti .'
- 31 Mar 2020, 08:51
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 17152
Re: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
I think the last stanza puts the poem onto a different level altogether.
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- 31 Mar 2020, 06:10
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 17152
Re: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
Bob.thanks.I copy pasted from a web page instead of copy pasting from word.
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- 30 Mar 2020, 19:59
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
- Replies: 6
- Views: 12659
Re: Elizabeth and Dante Gabriel Rossetti
Ready enough to be nominated for March! (Or is it April?)
Siva
Siva
- 29 Mar 2020, 20:23
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Paperfall (plus an extended title)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 17152
Re: Paperfall (Reworked)
Paperfall- (plus an extended title) The speed of the falling paper cascades in an arc. Speechless, a Japanese girl sits outside the attic window shredding paper. Her performance of white cataract matches her fluffy gown. The sound of paper flows and forms a mound on the ground, as a tributary of pap...