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I liked this poem I don't usually like this form But, I love rain poems I almost always like them That's not to say there is no merit in this other than the rain But I think it is a poem, and I enjoyed it. I hope no one addresses me over my poor critique or invites me to be potically polite. I think...

I read the poem, I understood it. I liked it...it flowed and I continued to prise our meaning and it answered a call in me, Poetry does that. Well, good poetry does. I read a few critiques, i saw some argument. But my comment is this: Beautiful, beautiful - beautiful. Thank goodness real poets are p...

Mike, you are a rascal. At least you stick to your chosen form, so brief and now you invent words. If only we apprecaited your work more.

Unspoken words are so absurd [cut out 'the' sounds better in my op.] [no rhyming line with absurd, but that's ok if that is what you want] They stress the soul like crazy I lock them up and give no thought [no need for 'so' cut it out keep sylable count same if poss.] Time will rend them hazy [sugge...

Its a poem, I just would like to follow the story and make sense of it.

One evening I was playing, running between trees when amma came up [if Amma is used as a name, which is what you mean otherwise you would have said my amma - then the capital letter is used as in a name] with a rolled up ball of my pinafore and they came walking saying, `'Yes yes, it is the sure thi...

UHm Siva, the whole purpose of this forum is to encourage writers to publish thier work. In fact, one of the conditons of memebrship is that the poet is serious about his work and intends to be published. I have been posting work on here for 3 years and have one poem nominated. I find nothing wrong ...

Thanks both, some room for thought there from me.

I wondered if this poem is good enugh to go forward for the next IB thing?

Change the topic What's the topic got to do with it? Change the clique Agree and grin Grin and bear it the in-crowd Only it costs to be part of them Individuality comes at a cost rapid thought processes some unstable Debate but agree to disagree a cliche They get angry mistate your views pigeon-hole...

My Thanks to Siva for her attention to detail,suddenly I am aware of my own shortcomings. I have been lazy in not changing the caital placed by the automatic editor. I prefer it that way but am not too sure of the convention. It is usful to know if the reader enjoyed the poem or made any sense of it...

A mixture of cultures here, not a bad thing, a Japanese dancer dances and is likened to a Tamil dancer dancing to his god or one of his gods. Then even stranger Moses is introduced as if the Indian subcontinent now embraces an Iraeli/Christian figure. Why not one may ask, why not indeed...only they ...

[The title lacks impact, it is too banal, suggets you shorten and give it something. Anything but this] Our ancestors, once lay on the banks of the Cauvery. [dead ancestors, ay buried, make sure we know they are dead] Stretched out, sandwiched between holy ash. [seemingly serenly? they were happy th...

Another great spark.

"The bull wasn't doing anyone any harm and now we've tracked him to where he came to see his dead friend and now were going to kill him."-ernest hemingway [if you intend to honour Hemingway why wouldn't you use convention and print his names as most do with capital letters? Ernest Hemingway, is it m...

I enjoyed the process, but my wife is jealous that I spend so much time on a poem... and not even my own. Best wishes in the competition. I don't think this poem is ready yet it needs much more work, but it is an exceptional spark and I guess many poets will copy in their own way.

Again I’m cycling the Dry Dock Road. The alarm rattles in its tin creating bedlam for a moment in the darkness Despair - at the early call longing to stay in the warm I dress hurridly in the damp air. Make Nescafe in a flask, add sugar and heave Dad's home-guard haversack over my back and peddle dow...

My Choice of Title would be (would as in if I had the choice): Idira [use her name] Her Golden Years [Notice capital letters for the title, no period.] Symptomatic Not born with it [this age malaise]. Eclipse swallows, pushing out great grandmothers and babies, so [omit that] death and life daisy ch...

Our ancestors, once lay on the banks of the Cauvery. Stretched out, sandwiched between holy ash. Bilva leaves and rock salt, mud and powdered brick pushed into the pit thrice, back turned, not looking. Why wait a year to build the cemetery? One year is one day for the departed, The the sun takes to ...

You are streaming water [rushing] over steep falls and I am the splashes beneath, that shoot up in all directions Once, we were both foamy white clinging to boulders. Our bubbles popping at the end of the day, thriving in the easy [rythems] of the current [rhymes to do with poetry, rhythem to do wit...

Counting days of churning buttermilk, skimming butter, melting ghee. Knowing full well the ultimate and penultimate day of being seated in a sitting posture. This Saivite , fit for burial, lowered into a cave, earth to earth. After the last ritualistic bath, [wash] with ghee and milk, grandpa's daug...

It is immaterial if it is about your mother, grandmother, paternal aunt or any other senile person, the point is that the title could be improved. If you don't agree, then that is your choice. You don't have to explain to me, it is your poem. There is a lot to do on gramtical mistakes. A pause or an...

With respect Siva, although the new title is a tad better it still has a negative conetation. Insanity is too strong a word for what you are trying to covey. Your grandparent was childlike, yes? and endearing, so although technically doctors might call her mad she was in fact entering her second chi...

Ok, the darned mongooses are sorted out. Not born with it. Eclipse swallows pushing out great grandmothers and babies, so that death and life daisy chain like phosphorescent super naturals and traffic whiz a whiz around her birth bed - grandmother's toe draws air circles to shoo away [not keen on ai...

I would heartily agree Michael that this poem is a gem and could represent this forum...however I cannot understand why the poet insists that the plural of mongoose is mongoose? The plural is mongooses, but mongeese may be used, but is rarely used. I think the poem is excellent, but it would not do ...

I think I know what you are trying to say, just wish it wasn't so prosaic. It could be a good poem. Needs work.