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- 11 Mar 2013, 04:34
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Dry Dock Road
- Replies: 10
- Views: 25958
Re: Dry Dock Road (I can Hear you all Groan)
Why is the first word of the third line of each stanza capitalized without there being any full stops? Why are there only two full stops and no commas in this entire poem? If you can answer those questions without guilt, then answer them, else don't bother. Poetry CAN circumvent traditional memes, b...
- 11 Mar 2013, 04:26
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: "magian"
- Replies: 3
- Views: 11948
Re: "magian"
Your skills are evident, but you're abusing poetic form to avoid punctuation. That's OK provided you CAN punctuate, IF you want to. But I'm new here and I don't know how skilled you are, so I have to assume that you can learn something: If you do have anything left to learn, then basic grammar is ne...
- 11 Mar 2013, 04:17
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: The Purple Cabbage
- Replies: 5
- Views: 15587
Re: The Purple Cabbage
As a universally accepted poem, this doesn't quite cut it. You're almost there, in that you have your own way of reading this poem out loud, and by the END we (the readers) have mostly got it. What you need to do is make us get it sooner, by sticking to a stricter meter, I say 'need', but it's more ...
- 11 Mar 2013, 04:05
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Surrogate
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12511
Re: Surrogate
Thanks Frank, possibly the most honest response I've ever received. Stick around.
- 12 Feb 2013, 19:33
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: me and her in the rain
- Replies: 6
- Views: 18717
Re: me and her in the rain
I am sorry for the rudeness of my earlier response, which I will now edit down as I don't want to discourage others form posting.
- 12 Feb 2013, 04:42
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Surrogate
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12511
Surrogate
Surrogate I am confused by this new source of sustenance, maybe it merits my reprieve, perhaps not. Now I drop everything and stand up and sit down and I frown because I need it but I don't. So I go to the toilet instead but Nothing comes out. I walk away half-dressed without the will to button-up, ...
- 12 Feb 2013, 04:36
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: me and her in the rain
- Replies: 6
- Views: 18717
Re: me and her in the rain
Line breaks are not a substitute for punctuation.
- 12 Feb 2013, 04:27
- Forum: Writer's Block - Where The Poets Hang
- Topic: Painting Mrs Roth's Apt.
- Replies: 17
- Views: 37221
Re: Painting Mrs Roth's Apt.
Oki Doki, my first post, may aswell rip a new hole, aka line by line. She needs Marigold Petals and Fresh Tangerine on the East wall. why capitalise everything except 'wall', it's as nouny as everything else here. Eggshell. I flinch at the idea of a border - it is not included in my quote. Wow Egshe...