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Michael (MV)
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#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 01 Sep 2012, 05:42

genuine art
still life alive
like a guilt free muffin top

                        sunlight doesn't fall / manna / spreads / on stain'd glass / like good news
like the hum of the hive wakes the bear -- Honey

I use
up all my rhymes

it's time to return to

shooting the 5 marbles of my

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Re: "triad"

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 02 Sep 2012, 07:27

I like this version better than the previous one. I think you are experimenting with new styles.Beyond that I am not able to suggest any

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