Passive aggressive heart ache

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Mandylrandall
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Passive aggressive heart ache

#1 Post by Mandylrandall » 24 Feb 2013, 03:08

[]The unspoken words are so absurd
They take on a whole new crazy
So I lock them up and give them no more thought
My heart has gotten lazy
It can no longer hold on to chronic distraught
Please know this silence is for me
Dare not that I do not see
Im just never going to manifest
The fact you have been caught
Enjoy the bliss
But know it is not out of my ignorance

ryan
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Re: Passive aggressive heart ache

#2 Post by ryan » 24 Feb 2013, 17:36

No new ground covered in the overused theme of oh woe is me

FrankDyer
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Re: Passive aggressive heart ache

#3 Post by FrankDyer » 11 Mar 2013, 01:51

Unspoken words are so absurd [cut out 'the' sounds better in my op.]

[no rhyming line with absurd, but that's ok if that is what you want]
They stress the soul like crazy

I lock them up and give no thought [no need for 'so' cut it out keep sylable count same if poss.]

Time will rend them hazy [suggestion, see if you like]
[Go on in that vein, rhyming poetry isn't always easy, it takies hard work.]

It can no longer hold on to chronic distraught
Please know this silence is for me
Dare not that I do not see
Im just never going to manifest
The fact you have been caught
Enjoy the bliss
But know it is not out of my ignorance

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