Pete's Purple Bobs

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ealove89
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Pete's Purple Bobs

#1 Post by ealove89 » 13 Dec 2013, 06:25

sex sex sex sex
sexy sects of exceptional sexiness
stew craft
learn your stew craft
smart salty stew
I sniff you
left alone with this comparatively
small batch of stew
I will eat you
snail on the corncob
snails on the corncobs
corn cobz
purple bobs
"Pete has purple bobs"
"What are those?"
"THOSE are Pete's purple bobs,
leave 'em alone."
could I explain?
a dog has two eyes, two ears, two lungs,
two bobs
and usually eyebrows
he had a stalwart young mind
he grasped this immediately

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Billy
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Re: Pete's Purple Bobs

#2 Post by Billy » 14 Dec 2013, 21:14

I keep reading the last line as:

he grasped his immediately

ealove89
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Re: Pete's Purple Bobs

#3 Post by ealove89 » 20 Dec 2013, 09:28

Maybe...it does!

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Re: Pete's Purple Bobs

#4 Post by dyerfrank » 27 Dec 2013, 14:41

There was a time one wold visit a place for poetry like this. A place where one could take a slash and this sort of work would keep one interested duting the amout of time it took. The old fashioned word for such places was: lavatory. Maybe in your town there are no more lavatories so you post on here, how honourable!

ealove89
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Re: Pete's Purple Bobs

#5 Post by ealove89 » 28 Dec 2013, 06:21

Aw, thanks man. I truly appreciate the scathing, and yet, brilliantly comedic reply! You are funny guy! Please post more generic poems about how you're lonely and life is a deep, dark place! A truly original voice!

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