Absence

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SivaRamanathan
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Absence

#1 Post by SivaRamanathan » 14 Dec 2013, 21:46

I thought I could keep you out ; I cannot.

You appear on Skype as full as Guru Purnima.

Whenever I try to craft my poems I am stuck.

When you were here I went about my way

driving to poetry readings; Now that you are away

you occupy my thoughts; the mind holds no vacuum.

It is playing solitaire with my poems, emptying it

into the recycle bin.I keep thinking about migrating birds

that fly from the Arctic to Antarctic, and back to the Arctic

cutting across oceans with twigs in their beaks ;

a twig to keep them afloat to fish; a twig

they must never forget to leave behind .

I need your voice to survive.

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Re: Absence

#2 Post by dyerfrank » 27 Dec 2013, 14:52

Really liked, it grabbed me straight away, most interesting a deep theme a longing for something lost. I had not heard of these twigs, can it be true, can a poet invent an imaginary device that is logical and yet untrue. I would trust the poet on this, sounds fascinating.

ealove89
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Re: Absence

#3 Post by ealove89 » 28 Dec 2013, 08:02

Fever!

Michael (MV)
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Re: Absence

#4 Post by Michael (MV) » 01 Jan 2014, 06:29

Hi Siva,

I lost a longer crit/commentary.

I saw this as a conflict of Heart & head.

The head remembers; the Heart recalls.

The head recycles; the Heart revives



The last 6 lines are the best.


twigs in the beak; Heart in the voice


Below, I have reformatted, etc., for your perusal:


Siva,

would Absence be available for Upcoming IBPC January 2014:

link: viewtopic.php?f=3&t=5775


Thanks

Happy New Year   8)  

Michael (MV)



I thought I could keep you out; I cannot.
You appear on Skype as full as Guru Purnima.

Whenever I try to craft my poems I am stuck.
When you were here, I went about my way

driving to poetry readings; Now that you're away
my mind can't vacuum thoughts of you.

It is playing solitaire with my poems, emptying it
into the recycle bin, like migrating birds

that fly from the Arctic to Antarctic, and back to the Arctic
cutting across oceans with twigs in their beaks

to keep them afloat to fish; a twig
they must never forget to leave behind.

I need your voice to survive.


 

 

 

 
 
 
 


 
 

 
 
 
 
 

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Absence

#5 Post by SivaRamanathan » 01 Jan 2014, 07:37

Michael
Thank you for formatting this poem.I am learning a lot from you.And for suggesting to forward it to IBPC.I wrote this two years ago and posted it here on impulse.Now I am glad you have tailored it into a neat two liner poem with a last line that tells it all.
And a happy New year to you and all my fellow poet friends in this block.
Siva

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Absence

#6 Post by SivaRamanathan » 01 Jan 2014, 14:54

Dyerfrank
Thanks for reading.
It is the Artic Tern.The 'twig ' is a model for 'responsibility' in Business Administration classes. An astrologer told me this stoct of survival.

This web page is dedicated to communication on the migration of the Arctic tern – the longest migration ever recorded in any animal. The main goal is to present the research results of the first ever scientific study to use tracking devices to follow a full annual cycle of Arctic tern migration. In the menu to the left you will find background information on the Arctic tern, the migration study along with maps and photos.




Follow the impressive journey of the Arctic tern from the breeding grounds in Greenland to Antarctica and back in this Google Earth Tour combining maps, animations and photos.




Bird of the sun is a photographic celebration of the Arctic tern. Each year the small-sized seabird performs the longest known migration: From the breeding grounds in Greenland to Antarctica.

Click on the icon to the right - navigate with arrows - end the session with "ESCAPE"




This study on Arctic tern migration was conducted by researchers from the Greenland Institute of Natural Resources and Icelandic Institute of Natural History, in cooperation with the British Antarctic Survey, and National Environmental Research Institute, Aarhus University. The project is adopted by the CAFF (Conservation of Arctic Flora and Fauna) Circumpolar Seabird Group as part of a larger coordinated research

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Re: Absence

#7 Post by SivaRamanathan » 01 Jan 2014, 19:59

this story of survival.

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Re: Absence

#8 Post by SivaRamanathan » 01 Jan 2014, 21:30

the Arctic Tern.

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