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found poem

#1 Post by Billy » 06 Jan 2014, 19:37

This was not meant to be a poem, but a rather funny list that was a hoax:
  • The Eskimos' Hundred Words for Snow
    by Phil James

    tlapa powder snow
    tlacringit snow that is crusted on the surface
    kayi drifting snow
    tlapat still snow
    klin remembered snow
    naklin forgotten snow
    tlamo snow that falls in large wet flakes
    tlatim snow that falls in small flakes
    tlaslo snow that falls slowly
    tlapinti snow that falls quickly
    kripya snow that has melted and refrozen
    tliyel snow that has been marked by wolves
    tliyelin snow that has been marked by Eskimos
    blotla blowing snow
    pactla snow that has been packed down
    hiryla snow in beards
    wa-ter melted snow
    tlayinq snow mixed with mud
    quinaya snow mixed with Husky shit
    quinyaya snow mixed with the shit of a lead dog
    slimtla snow that is crusted on top but soft underneath
    kriplyana snow that looks blue in the early morning
    puntla a mouthful of snow because you fibbed
    allatla baked snow
    fritla fried snow
    gristla deep fried snow
    MacTla snow burgers
    jatla snow between your fingers or toes, or in groin-folds
    dinliltla little balls of snow that cling to Husky fur
    sulitlana green snow
    mentlana pink snow
    tidtla snow used for cleaning
    ertla snow used by Eskimo teenagers for exquisite erotic rituals
    kriyantli snow bricks
    hahatla small packages of snow given as gag gifts
    semtla partially melted snow
    ontla snow on objects
    intla snow that has drifted indoors
    shlim slush
    warintla snow used to make Eskimo daiquiris
    mextla snow used to make Eskimo Margaritas
    penstla the idea of snow
    mortla snow mounded on dead bodies
    ylaipi tomorrow's snow
    nylaipin the snows of yesteryear ("neiges d'antan")
    pritla our children's snow
    nootlin snow that doesn't stick
    rotlana quickly accumulating snow
    skriniya snow that never reaches the ground
    bluwid snow that's shaken down from objects in the wind
    tlanid snow that's shaken down and then mixes with sky-falling snow
    ever-tla a spirit made from mashed fermented snow,
    popular among Eskimo men
    talini snow angels
    priyakli snow that looks like it's falling upward
    chiup snow that makes halos
    blontla snow that's shaken off in the mudroom
    tlalman snow sold to German tourists
    tlalam snow sold to American tourists
    tlanip snow sold to Japanese tourists
    protla snow packed around caribou meat
    attla snow that as it falls seems to create nice pictures
    in the air
    sotla snow sparkling with sunlight
    tlun snow sparkling with moonlight
    astrila snow sparkling with starlight
    clim snow sparkling with flashlight or headlight
    tlapi summer snow
    krikaya snow mixed with breath
    ashtla expected snow that's wagered on (depth, size of flakes)
    huantla special snow rolled into "snow reefers" and smoked
    by wild Eskimo youth
    tla-na-na snow mixed with the sound of old rock and roll
    from a portable radio
    depptla a small snowball, preserved in Lucite, that had been handled
    by Johnny Depp
    trinkyi first snow of the year
    tronkyin last snow of the year
    shiya snow at dawn
    katiyana night snow
    tlinro snow vapor
    nyik snow with flakes of widely varying size
    ragnitla two snowfalls at once, creating moire patterns
    akitla snow falling on water
    privtla snow melting in the spring rain
    chahatlin snow that makes a sizzling sound as it falls on water
    hootlin snow that makes a hissing sound as the
    individual flakes brush
    geltla snow dollars
    briktla good building snow
    striktla snow that's no good for building
    erolinyat snow drifts containing the imprint of crazy lovers
    chachat swirling snow that drives you nuts
    krotla snow that blinds you
    tlarin snow that can be sculpted into the delicate corsages
    Eskimo girls pin to their whale parkas at prom time
    motla snow in the mouth
    sotla snow in the south
    maxtla snow that hides the whole village
    tlayopi snow drifts you fall into and die
    truyi avalanche of snow
    tlapripta snow that burns your scalp and eyelids
    carpitla snow glazed with ice
    tla ordinary snow

SivaRamanathan
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Re: found poem

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 07 Jan 2014, 13:52

Billy
Good as it is. Nothing needs to be edited.The last line which talks of the ordinary snow deserves to be the last line--making a fitting ending.

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