Fake Streets

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Smmrtmestos
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Joined: 06 Feb 2014, 08:06

Fake Streets

#1 Post by Smmrtmestos » 12 Feb 2014, 07:08

Blah blah blah
Is what I hear
When you open your mouth
The sound of the choice of words
To rhyme in your raps

All I was doin
Was passin through
But you decided
You had something to prove
Son let me show you how it’s done
It’s a choice I made a long time ago
To take what I see is fake
And bring it to the light of day
And put it to shame
In that way I can break
The chain you’ve been holding on for so long
I’m going to take your words
And make you eat them too

The truth is you think you’ve
Lived a hard thug life on the streets
But to me it seems like your week
Kuz you steal and sell weed and other things
Kuz you couldn’t get a job
Every day I hear someone say
They’re gangsta real and raw
Truth is your nothing
That’s just what you saw on TV
You’re just a looser afraid
And too lazy to get a job

A true gangsta is real
He doesn’t steal from his own
Like Robin Hood
Taking from kings
And gives to those in need like the poor
People he calls his own

You made the world hate you
Kuz you have no clue what it’s like
To be a true teacher among your people
And now you corrupt the minds of the young
Who wanna be just like ya
But your just criminals
And I tell you the truth
Hell was made for you
Don’t get mad
Just remember one thing
You did it to your selves

dyerfrank
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Joined: 09 Nov 2013, 03:17

Re: Fake Streets

#2 Post by dyerfrank » 17 Feb 2014, 02:51

I have attempted not to respond to this poem, but it seems I have failed in that. I see no new work on the forum so your is the only one left.
Is it a rant poem against rap? Seems like it. It uses rap to beat up rap, novel undertaking. But more than that its a rave with a moral tone. It must be a rant about American city life, it is well done I must admit. I could not see it at first. Yet it is strange you use the same mode of expression that you say you dislike so much, or the culture that spawned rap.
Personally I would be gald to see rap buried forever along with crazy stuff like Alice in Wonderful make believe words, and list poems, or minimalist poems, or romantic airy fairy poems.
Recently I have become aware of the power of lyrics in songs, they can be so banal at times yet when set to music in a film they can create a powerful effect, so powerful it can change lives. So carry on doing what you do, even if some of us are stick in the muds.

Smmrtmestos
Posts: 36
Joined: 06 Feb 2014, 08:06

Re: Fake Streets

#3 Post by Smmrtmestos » 17 Feb 2014, 15:38

Thank you for responding. I'm glad I'm not the only one that feels that way about rap. My goal was to "attack" rap using rap. I try to be as unconventional as possible lol. If I may ask, why have you attempted not to respond?

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