"reacting to Hoffman's last scene"

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Michael (MV)
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"reacting to Hoffman's last scene"

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 20 Feb 2014, 20:03

 
1/ Each soul is stellar indeed a star is borne

There is no pain in being
born to be alive
pre-sent - no audition required

despairing from not really living
the part you are gifted for

like an actor out of a play
existence out of breath


2/
Tragedy is a sympton not the source
upstage that addiction

rulers casting themselves in the role of lovers
extras prescribed as impromptu
pain killers numb down to finale
free as false balcony vows

no Wonder
the heartless performance
bit parts lack pulse thumbs down

a trapdoor for Death to crawl up for a cameo op
not written in the script


3/
Not one of us makes a clean sweep
and sometimes across the wrong stage
each casts a shadow of doubt
turning down parts written just for you

in the drama of the moment
even the Superstar had His

then suffering became a source
for the joy of Inspiration
no child left prodigal from a compassion play


4/
Reach exceeding mezzanine heights
being too alive
the joy so real
the intensity of paracosm
unrehearsed upon this globe

experimental en plein air
following cues ahead of time

theater not in the round
it gets uneven reviews


5/ Dim the marquee lights

a bright phantom gesture
to pretend the end

for all the body is but a stage
for the One man production
directing the exit from this opera
with an ecstatic finale to Entrance

Universal reversal
spread the rave review
that all has been
a dress rehearsal

for an infinite run off broadway
arrival above the red carpet
and no curtains
for real actors








 
 
 
 
 
 

preclovis14
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Re: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"

#2 Post by preclovis14 » 20 Feb 2014, 20:32

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SivaRamanathan
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Re: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"

#3 Post by SivaRamanathan » 22 Feb 2014, 06:28

Michael

This has to be read several times and understood at all levels.I am doing just that.

Siva

SivaRamanathan
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Re: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"

#4 Post by SivaRamanathan » 28 Feb 2014, 10:06

Michael

I nominate Michael's "reacting to Hoffman's last scene" for March IBPC.

Siva

dyerfrank
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Re: "reacting to Hoffman's last scene"

#5 Post by dyerfrank » 04 Mar 2014, 22:55

Unusual for Michael, a long poem, It looks profound at first glance, let us see!



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