Of Petticoats and Bicycles

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dyerfrank
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Of Petticoats and Bicycles

#1 Post by dyerfrank » 27 Feb 2014, 23:52

His hand tapped the table
Dissolutely he spoke of wanting
wanton in his thoughts
A yearning that could not be satisfied

meenas17
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Re: Of Petticotes and Bicycles

#2 Post by meenas17 » 29 Mar 2014, 09:12

dyerfrank,

Petticoats and Bicycles -a quaint title.
Spoke of wanting and wanton in thoughts tells us what the poem is about with yearning adding to the theme.
The passion is subtly revealed.
It is a poem structurally sane with lot of inferences going with the words,
Much is left not said as is found in
The throwing of petticoats white, high with every pretty stroke.
A good attempt.
meenas17

dyerfrank
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Re: Of Petticotes and Bicycles

#3 Post by dyerfrank » 29 Mar 2014, 16:02

Thanks meenas

Thank you for your critique, I appreciate it.

Frank

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