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Of Petticoats and Bicycles

Posted: 27 Feb 2014, 23:52
by dyerfrank
His hand tapped the table
Dissolutely he spoke of wanting
wanton in his thoughts
A yearning that could not be satisfied

Re: Of Petticotes and Bicycles

Posted: 29 Mar 2014, 09:12
by meenas17
dyerfrank,

Petticoats and Bicycles -a quaint title.
Spoke of wanting and wanton in thoughts tells us what the poem is about with yearning adding to the theme.
The passion is subtly revealed.
It is a poem structurally sane with lot of inferences going with the words,
Much is left not said as is found in
The throwing of petticoats white, high with every pretty stroke.
A good attempt.

Re: Of Petticotes and Bicycles

Posted: 29 Mar 2014, 16:02
by dyerfrank
Thanks meenas

Thank you for your critique, I appreciate it.

Frank