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The Sweeper - version 3

Posted: 04 Mar 2014, 23:09
by dyerfrank
Herman spoke loudly as if he were in a cave
and we sat a hundred feet away
Deploring the natives, despising their ways
He gulped his cold beer, longing for
Prussian streets, paved and swept

Our barman nodded bravely as if he understood
His hair pressed flat and sleek
on his brown head, perfumed sweat

Re: The Sweeper - version 2

Posted: 27 Mar 2014, 07:33
by meenas17
A contempt is expressed in the lines.
'a human being pretending
to be a vacuum cleaner,

None pretend while doing a job.


It is a prose poem. Stanzas have been deliberately formed.
Meena

Re: The Sweeper - version 2

Posted: 27 Mar 2014, 17:02
by dyerfrank
Thanks for commenting.