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Michael (MV)
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cinquain-poem

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 23 Mar 2014, 22:05

 
"Time share"


Share time
with, not spend cash
on children. Family
that shares together forever
fulfilled


 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Re: cinquain-poem

#2 Post by dyerfrank » 27 Mar 2014, 00:14

Very good.

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Re: cinquain-poem

#3 Post by meenas17 » 27 Mar 2014, 07:40

Good cinquain-poem
Telegraphic language.
meenas17

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Re: cinquain-poem

#4 Post by Michael (MV) » 05 Apr 2014, 22:45

Thanks dyerfrank; Thanks meenas17,

I may have to send this one to the IBPC final this time.

Billy is representing
Still haven't heard back from Mojave

Any recommendation

absolute deadline is the 7th

SOS

Thanks

Michael (MV)

 

 
 

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Re: cinquain-poem

#5 Post by SivaRamanathan » 06 Apr 2014, 19:48

"Time share"


Share time with,
not spend cash
on children. Family
that shares together
forever fulfilled.

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Re: cinquain-poem

#6 Post by SivaRamanathan » 06 Apr 2014, 20:20

Michael
Please send this cinquain poem. I am not very happy with this though. It is not like your original writing. It sounds like a found poem.

Michael (MV)
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Re: cinquain-poem

#7 Post by Michael (MV) » 07 Apr 2014, 06:57

Thanks, Siva, for reading, recommending,

and for expressing your concern - I understand, and I will now clarify:

True, this cinquain-poem generated after reading another poem - just as poems are after a painting, or memory, or topical, etc..

I followed through, and brought forth another poem, and in its own form - albeit not a free form, but a pre-existing syllabic fix form.

One creativity giving birth to another : à la ekphrasis.


Siva,

I will now try to share some time on your snake poem.
Still haven't received a response from Mojave.
Deadline is tomorrow, the 7th.

Siva, if you are not already representing another board with a poem
how about your snake poem?

Thanks.


Sincerely,

8)

Michael (MV)
 

 

 

 

 
 

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