Domestic help is common
employing men and women
the errands are done
sweeping and mopping
with rags long ago
replaced with brush now.
Need drives the sweeper
to take up the chore
he who received wages low long ago
now lives in ease
has shed his lowliness
holds his head high.
Domestic Help
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Re: Domestic Help
Hi meenas17,
I find the 2nd stanza stronger - much stronger - might stand alone as the poem itself:
Need drives the sweeper
to take up the chore
he who received wages low long ago
now lives in ease
has shed his lowliness
holds his head high.
^^ maybe some of the 1st stanza can judiciously be incorporated into the 2nd
^^ last 3 lines in particular - to me they have the lift of an eulogic epitaph
Eulogia
now living in ease
lowliness shed
head held high.
Michael (MV)
I find the 2nd stanza stronger - much stronger - might stand alone as the poem itself:
Need drives the sweeper
to take up the chore
he who received wages low long ago
now lives in ease
has shed his lowliness
holds his head high.
^^ maybe some of the 1st stanza can judiciously be incorporated into the 2nd
^^ last 3 lines in particular - to me they have the lift of an eulogic epitaph
Eulogia
now living in ease
lowliness shed
head held high.
Michael (MV)
Re: Domestic Help
Michael,
Need drives the sweeper
to take up the chore
sweeping manually before
replaced by gadgets now
he who received wages low long ago
now lives in ease
has shed his lowliness
holds his head high.
I have incorporated the first stanza into the second.
Hope it works out.
meena
Need drives the sweeper
to take up the chore
sweeping manually before
replaced by gadgets now
he who received wages low long ago
now lives in ease
has shed his lowliness
holds his head high.
I have incorporated the first stanza into the second.
Hope it works out.
meena
meenas17