The Photo and a Face - edit 1

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The Photo and a Face - edit 1

#1 Post by dyerfrank » 06 Apr 2014, 02:27

He looked to see his brother's face
return his stare as Donald did
A photo worn and from an early
time, far older than this present age.

He wore a jacket creased and stained
and clutched a book well used and read
all creased and with a golden edge
He knew of course his brother dead

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Re: The Photo and a Face - edit 1

#2 Post by meenas17 » 14 Jun 2014, 08:50

The photo tells a lot
The age is defined in book well used.
Jacket creased and stained illustrates the time
Short but reflective.

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Re: The Photo and a Face - edit 1

#3 Post by FranklyDire » 14 Jun 2014, 22:44

Thanks again on behalf of my cousin, now that I red it again I like it more than first I penned it... thank you.

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