Dark Nipple of the Figs

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Dark Nipple of the Figs

#1 Post by ryan » 26 Apr 2014, 01:48

[ “Dark Nipple of the Figs” ]
The things we said, or chose not to; the way it happens
when the mind divides, makes an eye flinch. I know
as a door opens to a darker room you'll find it is
a warm September evening. Sometimes we kissed
appetizing female forms in our mind. The way it happened
we heard my mother's voice, we played frightening games
such as neverending. We were lonely and hapless and ordinary.
What is a gust of wind but the act of embrace?
What makes the dream the way it is, subtly aural
and finely positioned like your mouth: I am still
in bed, the drywall is my skin, your crumpled words
are a perturbed skeletal pattern adorned with molars
darned and huddled in, I suppose, for a process
in the time of history we never made specific.
Sometimes we heard the children crying in hunger
in our mind. We occupied ourselves with sufferings. A body
strolling away from you at some distance, once, twice,
or many times into the expanse of the heavens; your thigh,
dripping rosewater, insect wings, shadowed woods,
with a feeling of deep sadness that we had not fulfilled
our senses. Your head and face in particular. My hand
on your waist. When the temperature drops to the bottom
like the dandelion seeds of your breasts
it was pleasant to imagine I could see the queen of all
flowers already half-erased. You are sitting
at my kitchen table, tugging the spilled rice.
How can I tell you now, "my heart curls in sorrow
like autumn leaves." And yet later, holding your shoulder,
how could I say "your kiss tastes of blood, or wellwater
flecked with rust?"
* * * * *
*Title and two line from an Untitled poem by imaginary poet, Araki Yasusada

Michael (MV)
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Re: Dark Nipple of the Figs

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 06 May 2014, 08:37

Hi ryan,

re " . . . two line from an Untitled poem . . . "

^^ which lines are the 2 lines? Are they the first 2 lines of the poem? Thanks.


ryan,

If you are not already representing another board,
and this is your original, unpublished poem,

then would you let your poem

[ “Dark Nipple of the Figs” ]

represent the Block in the current IBPC

Please reply - accept or decline - in the designated thread at Palaver:

Upcoming IBPC May 2014: viewtopic.php?f=3&t=5872

If accepting, please read the intial information entry in that thread.

If accepting, please provide All the needed info in that thread,

and because of the deadline, ASAP Please. Thanks.

Sincerely,

Michael (MV)




 

 
 
 
 

Michael (MV)
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Re: Dark Nipple of the Figs

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 28 May 2014, 04:52

 
Hi ryan,

perhaps that next time is this time   :)

If you are not already representing another board,
and this is your original, unpublished poem,
then would you let your poem
[ “Dark Nipple of the Figs” ]
represent the Block in this upcoming IBPC.

Please reply - accept or decline - in the designated thread at Palaver:
Upcoming IBPC June 2014: viewtopic.php?f=3&t=5883

If accepting, please read the intial information entry in that thread,
and please provide All the needed info in that thread. Thanks, ryan.


Sincerely,

Michael (MV)



 
 
 
 

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Dark Nipple of the Figs

#4 Post by SivaRamanathan » 28 May 2014, 04:58

ryan

I am sure this time is the best time.

Siva

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