her sex is my only friend tonight but she may not be

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OCTOGENARIAN
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her sex is my only friend tonight but she may not be

#1 Post by OCTOGENARIAN » 13 Oct 2014, 00:03

her sex is my only friend tonight
but she may not be
the only thing I'm dying with is this picture of her peach suntan and bikini
and that's the way I want it
this haunted night haunted life ends with her naked
before the stars of beyond
she's right out of the pool
like a car commercial 1984
a comet that fell for me
but this pool is my everything
a swirl of permitted want
the beer goes down good
but not as good as her
and she cant find herself until she finds the love I was given
the night is at our feet
is it at you and yours
I hope so
too late is too close
the curtains dropped down
the theater is open
the world has paraded in
they always want me before I'm ready
but I'm ready for that
this is my life
i've betrayed disaster
and took its lessons
double blessed
when the poetry is exquisite in a table cloth
and a wooden cup for you and me
when the music in it rings into leaving your bondage behind
when the microphones exploded
when you've forgotten everything and lost it all but your faith
go home
go home with me
our heart is so big
its draped over the bed
its spiraling up to heaven around the holiest tree
boom
go on she says
but I already have
Ill see you up here

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Billy
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Joined: 22 Jun 2006, 10:56

Re: her sex is my only friend tonight but she may not be

#2 Post by Billy » 24 Oct 2014, 01:24

I really like these lines: our heart is so big/it's draped over the bed

N is dying, remembering the past? not sure here.
I like the line lengths.

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