Window Into the Mind

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FranktheFrank
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Location: Between the mountains and the sea

Window Into the Mind

#1 Post by FranktheFrank » 24 Jul 2019, 19:17

After they'd moved overseas
Sitske spent time drawing
windows, month after

month; each pane carefully
drawn, one row of three
12 high by 8 wide, split

into 4 panes 6 by 4.
The lower rank the same
as the top, set in rows.

‘Windows, Sitske pronounced emphatically,
these are the windows’
‘What about them?’ Mama asked.

The school-counsellor asked the same,
‘These are Geert’s windows,’ she replied.
‘Who is Geert?’

‘Gert is Geert of course.’

She paused,
a tear rolled, then Mama knew
in time, all would be well.

BobBradshaw
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Re: Mansions of the Mind

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 25 Jul 2019, 09:23

Sometimes more is more. I like the tone. But as a reader new to your work, I would ask who is Em? Why is she seeing a psychologist? How are Em and Ieuan related? Adding some background would help.

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