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Crucified scarecrow
With a pumpkin head
Summon forth
The King of the Dead

Gabriel, Gabriel
Come blow your horn
There's fire in the sky
And blood on the corn

I like this, it reads like a very old medieval chant...

however.

I think it might scan better if you eliminated the "a" in the second line,
and added "Summoning" instead summon to the third one. Read it out loud.
See if it works better.

Ok

sorry hon. sometimes I get carried away

A third stanza making the close more personal would help.

Hi Ken,

I understand Bob's workshop observation

I find with the current two, formally, they articulate like a medieval  diptych

I was arriving at the space in time to enter my observation into the thread - found that Bob had entered his

Yes, a possible triptych



Michael (MV)

Judy... You don't get carried away..

Bob. Michael I was just trying to post something in the spirit of Halloween
..thanks
I love seeing this place pop, lots of poems lately