Ellen and Waldo Emerson
Waldo, Waldo…
Even a year after my death
you feel my presence—
a light flicking by a window,
my breath stirring against your neck
as you lie on your side at night,
sleepless like that wretched moon.
It both pleases and saddens me
how you will suddenly stop
what you are doing, to lose yourself
in thoughts of me.
Remember when I was alive
how my perfume clung to you
after you would leave the house?
Loved, you carried me everywhere.
your future always with you.
Ellen and Waldo Emerson
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Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
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Is the linebreak in the fifth stanza, deliberate?
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Is the linebreak in the fifth stanza, deliberate?
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Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
Which line are you referring to?
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Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
whatever
you are doing, to lose yourself
Now I get it Bob.It is the syllable count of 'whatever which makes it necessary to keep it as a stand alone line.
you are doing, to lose yourself
Now I get it Bob.It is the syllable count of 'whatever which makes it necessary to keep it as a stand alone line.
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Re: Ellen and Waldo Emerson
No, I'm not counting syllables..."whatever" is standalone for emphasis....but if it doesn't work well to do that, I would like to know and include it in the next line. Bob