Another New Year's Eve in Prison

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BobBradshaw
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Another New Year's Eve in Prison

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 21 Jan 2020, 22:25

Another New Year's Eve in Prison

Every night I sleep with you, Alyssa.

Tonight's snow like I remember it falling
on a New Years’ Eve driving
to see you.

I fold you into my arms,
pray you'll never slip out of them
again.

The snow outside my window
like shredded love letters—

while inside these walls
there's never the ringing of bells,
just clanging doors.

SivaRamanathan
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Re: Another New Year's Eve

#2 Post by SivaRamanathan » 22 Jan 2020, 21:23

Bob

Terrific opening line.

S

BobBradshaw
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Re: In My Ce

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 23 Jan 2020, 21:58

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SivaRamanathan
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Re: In My Cell with Alicia on New Year's Eve

#4 Post by SivaRamanathan » 23 Jan 2020, 22:23

Bob
You have lost this line

Every night I sleep with you, Alyssa

Siva

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