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For Your Love

Posted: 16 May 2020, 05:57
by BobBradshaw
For Your Love

From the stroller you lift
your arms toward me

as if you’re merely stretching
after a long nap,

but when Grandma appears
you giggle! My jealousy

leapfrogs over reason
as she takes you

into her arms
as if you were a bouquet

of long stemmed
peonies.

Oh my little one, how
can I steal your love

from Grandma?
When she burrows her head

into your belly
you squeal with delight

but when I do the same?
You are as poker faced

as a tortoise.
Ashlyn, don’t I love you

more than anyone, even more
than Elvis or Keats?

What I wouldn’t give—
my stocks, my red sports car,

my season tickets to the Giants—
to be loved like Grandma,

to have you light up
like a firefly
in love

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 17 May 2020, 21:18
by SivaRamanathan
The poem works well. Do you need the last line?

S

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 18 May 2020, 02:03
by BobBradshaw
It’s a good question, Siva. Now that you raise it, I’m not sure.

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 22 May 2020, 17:38
by SivaRamanathan
I will google and see if fireflies light up,only in love.Is it to attract the opposite sex? I have seen porcupines shoot up their quills,like peacocks their feathers.

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 22 May 2020, 17:54
by SivaRamanathan
I will google and see if fireflies light up,only in love.Is it to attract the opposite sex? I have seen porcupines shoot up their quills,like peacocks their feathers.

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 22 May 2020, 21:17
by BobBradshaw
It's to signal to attract the bachelors. Do fireflies experience anything like love? Who knows?

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 22 May 2020, 22:49
by SivaRamanathan
So which firefly lights up,the male or female? If it is to signal the bachelors then it must be the female.

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 23 May 2020, 01:10
by BobBradshaw
I think both do.

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 29 May 2020, 02:57
by Michael (MV)
 
Interesting, Bob,

a paternal pining for the affection of his daughter

I believe the narrator maybe doesn't understand that there is a grandmother-grandchild love and there is a parent-child love.

Each rapport is unique equal with different expression. It's like men aren't invited & attend bridal & baby showers.

The granddaughter is going to respond to grandmother in expressions reserved for grandmother; and to the father, with expressions just for daddy.


last line not needed - the firefly finale is fine & fitting

and gives me lyrical cause to link & share to this buried treasure: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X8tmdrQ7Ri8


Thanks, Bob, I do like the brave expression of this broem,

8)

Michael (MV)

 

 

 
 
 
 
 

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 30 May 2020, 01:38
by BobBradshaw
Thx, Michael... enjoyed the link

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 21 Jun 2020, 18:55
by Michael (MV)
Highlighting this broem
to honor Bob

this Father's Day.
How wonder -

(serendipitous:
poetic coincidence) -

if the IBPC results
were announced on this Sunday

and Bob's father & child poem
appeared on the winner's list.

Bob, without thinking about it,
sunrise inspired me to make this move and compose this prose-poem:

Our Father's instrumental
through me to celebrate the occasion

(Michael's keeping this Sabbath
sacred as only he is able,
born to be just brother-son
never to sire)

Bob, Thank you sharing
your creativity & constructive workshop.

Thank you, too, for bringing IBPC honors
home to the Writer's Block.

Sincerely in the spirit of creativity,
8) Michael (MV)

Re: For Your Love

Posted: 22 Jun 2020, 00:13
by BobBradshaw
Thanks, Michael. You’re very generous and always have been. Mucho gracias