Who knew you would become a comet

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BobBradshaw
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Who knew you would become a comet

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 06 Jul 2020, 07:48

Who knew you would become a comet

streaking away from us, our family
a trail of dust?

How could you jettison
15 years of marriage
and a daughter?

I am over you,
having burned
our wedding album

and tons of photos.
I ignore rumors
of your engagement

but Julie misses you.
Every day she checks her phone
for your voice--

a voice that
may take years
to reach her.

Michael (MV)
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Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57

Re: Who knew you would become a comet

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 07 Jul 2020, 10:12

but Julie misses you.
Every day she searches her phone
listening for your voice--

a voice that
may take lightyears
to reach her.


😎

Michael (MV )

BobBradshaw
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Re: Who knew you would become a comet

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 11 Jul 2020, 19:50

Thx for workshopping, Michael

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