Marry Me

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BobBradshaw
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Marry Me

#1 Post by BobBradshaw » 08 Aug 2020, 20:56

Marry Me

"The whole ballpark was cheering."
What did you say? I asked.
"I couldn't hear over the crowd
a word he was saying

but the cheering got me excited
and I stood up jumping like crazy
and my boyfriend thought I
had said yes.

Robert threw his arms
around me and five years later
we have three daughters and a son...
She smiled slightly,

like someone seven weeks pregnant
who hasn't told anyone yet.

Michael (MV)
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Joined: 18 Apr 2005, 04:57

Re: Marry Me

#2 Post by Michael (MV) » 24 Aug 2020, 17:12

Hi Bob,

workshop suggest to bring a foreshadowing imagery to the game 😎 Michael (MV)


but the cheering got me excited
and I stood up bouncing
like a bouquet toss
and my boyfriend took it
I had said yes.

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