"...therefore I am"

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Michael (MV)
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"...therefore I am"

#1 Post by Michael (MV) » 23 Aug 2020, 19:13

I fall free
from the flat-line

I don't fall in line

I fall
in love

how could I
not care

that's how I fell in
for the fall

that is uplifting
to home free

eternally

BobBradshaw
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Re: "...therefore I am"

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 25 Aug 2020, 00:50

I like the line “ I fall free from the flat-line”.

Michael (MV)
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Re: "...therefore I am"

#3 Post by Michael (MV) » 02 Sep 2020, 19:45

Hi Bob,

After your workshop, that line has surfaced to the lead - Thanks

and I hope I have since evolved the poem.

Bob, in its current incarnation, do you think this poem could also represent the WB in the upcoming September IBPC? If so, please voice in the September IBPC thread at palaver:

viewtopic.php?f=3&t=7820


Thanks Bob,

Michael (MV)

RamanathanSiva
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Re: "...therefore I am"

#4 Post by RamanathanSiva » 03 Sep 2020, 07:12

Michael

I second your poem.

Siva Ramanathan

Michael (MV)
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Re: "...therefore I am"

#5 Post by Michael (MV) » 03 Sep 2020, 15:09

Thanks, Siva,

Please voice in the thread at Palaver:

viewtopic.php?f=3&t=7820

😎

Michael (MV)

RamanathanSiva wrote:
03 Sep 2020, 07:12
Michael

I second your poem.

Siva Ramanathan

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