remember September
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remember September
the dapple fades
from the fawn --
early fall
summer falls apart
autumn leaves
packed in bags
curbside
the dapple fades
from the fawn
as summer falls
apart, and leaves carried away
packed in bags curbside
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Re: remember September
Lovely imagery in the opening and closing stanzas. The summer line... it doesn’t feel necessary
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Re: remember September
Thanks, Bob,
I have added below the original
a study in 3 part harmony
Michael (MV)
I have added below the original
a study in 3 part harmony
Michael (MV)
BobBradshaw wrote: ↑24 Sep 2020, 00:44Lovely imagery in the opening and closing stanzas. The summer line... it doesn’t feel necessary
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Re: remember September
Thanks, Billy
and Welcome back to the workshop
Makes me wonder about the various reasons why people no longer appear; and then sometimes reappear
Billy, wonderful to see your return.
I recall your interesr in and skill with haiku.
Here is another I reaped from this imagistic sow:
summer
raked in
body bags
Michael (MV)
and Welcome back to the workshop
Makes me wonder about the various reasons why people no longer appear; and then sometimes reappear
Billy, wonderful to see your return.
I recall your interesr in and skill with haiku.
Here is another I reaped from this imagistic sow:
summer
raked in
body bags
Michael (MV)
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Re: remember September
Terrific haiku, Michael!