Moonbeam

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Billy
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Moonbeam

#1 Post by Billy » 26 Sep 2020, 03:00

Moonbeam

From across the room
the only one in the crowd
smiling to herself

has caught me staring,
seems to have felt
something indescribable

that awakens her
which I've mused to be
a form of telepathy

or soul touching another
soul, effective only when
selfless as I learned

experimenting
with the phenomenon
and having no results

when out of lust
I pursued females
with my thoughts

hoping to attract one,
their responses cold
if they saw me leering,

not like her, a smile
opening larger
like a fully blossoming

flower as I continue to look
without guilt, embarrassed,
in need of nothing more.

Kenneth2816
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Re: Moonbeam

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 26 Sep 2020, 04:00

Well good theme. Great line and stanza breaks too. An experience easy to relate to. Nice work

BobBradshaw
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Re: Moonbeam

#3 Post by BobBradshaw » 26 Sep 2020, 20:18

Yep, you nailed a universal experience...who can't like these lines:

a smile
opening larger
like a fully blossoming

flower as I continue to look
without guilt, embarrassed,
in need of nothing more.

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Re: Moonbeam

#4 Post by Billy » 27 Sep 2020, 18:42

Thanks Kenneth, Bob

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Re: Moonbeam

#5 Post by RamanathanSiva » 27 Sep 2020, 21:52

Billy. A moment well caught and written about. I usually don’t relate to soul poems, but here the beauty of the selfless soul touching comes through. Siva

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Re: Moonbeam

#6 Post by Billy » 28 Sep 2020, 00:57

Thanks Siva

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