Outer Banks in Autumn

[Kenneth2816]

The light this evening on Pamlico,
by proxy of a socialist moon, makes
the red drum run in dizzying schools.

Crab men trick their culling sticks,
fill pots with mounds of chicken
neck, pull from a bottle and wait.

The screwpile lighthouse at Bluff Shoals
keeps watch with its one good eye
for the daily mail boat from Ocracoke.

Nothing has changed here in a century.
The same derelict wrecks on the bottom,
the same dialectical wheel of gulls.

Depression runs in my family line.
I come here alone, no knot of tourists,
to drown in history and Scotch whiskey.

[Billy]

Really like “dialectical wheel of gulls”.
All great images that work well with the end.

[Kenneth2816]

Thanks. Coming off a dry patch. Hard to be inspired.

[BobBradshaw]

Good piece. So good to have you back, and to read your work.

Love these 3 lines especially:

Nothing has changed here in a century.
The same derelict wrecks on the bottom,
the same dialectical wheel of gulls.

[Michael (MV)]

Hi Ken,

and Welcome back to the workshop.

All I see to recommend is a typo fix -

"keeps watch with it's one good eye"

^^ it's should be its -

keeps watch with its one good eye


Esp like:

"by proxy of a socialist moon"

I hear(and see) a unique phrasing of
"by the light of the moon"

and the moon is socialistic without a political platform or agenda -

a socialist moon
for all
seasons


And now I see a possible need, also, for a comma after Pamlico:

The light this evening on Pamlico,
by proxy of a socialist moon, makes
the red drum run in dizzying schools.




the light of the moon is the light of the sun

Michael (MV)

[Kenneth2816]

Thanks Bob.

Good ear Michael. I'll fix the typo and punctuation.

[RamanathanSiva]

Ken I am able to relate to the music of the poem.
Siva

[Kenneth2816]

Thank you Siva