An Open Box

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Billy
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An Open Box

#1 Post by Billy » 29 Sep 2020, 20:07

An Open Box

Whatever was inside, gone.
A label addressed to me

with a return address to me.
Small, brown worries

concealed in white tissue,
smelling of smoke,

and a past at tongue's tip.
Does it get any better?

I keep hoping like the man
who sawed his arm off to live.

Kenneth2816
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Joined: 01 Jun 2008, 09:17

Re: An Open Box

#2 Post by Kenneth2816 » 30 Sep 2020, 14:54

Yes. The last line. Powerful short poem

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