Heavenly Blue

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Billy
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Heavenly Blue

#1 Post by Billy » 13 Oct 2020, 22:37

Heavenly Blue

Sparrows, like children,
hop and play,
minor squabbles
settled with sharp retorts,
a shadow peck.
A song, however meager,
multiplies days
like blowing leaves
turning in the sun.

Morning glory
climbs in perfect grace,
higher and higher,
assisted by other plants,
lattice, whatever objects
within reach
bow to its search
for light's
brilliant envoi.

I watch the ascent
as if it's yesterday
becoming the future.
A multitude
of newborn flowers
grab their chance
at tender light.
A choir
in heavenly blue robes
silenced at noon.

RamanathanSiva
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Re: Heavenly Blue

#2 Post by RamanathanSiva » 13 Oct 2020, 22:52

The heavenly blue is the colour of the sky from dawn to noon? I like the conceit of the lattice bowing down for the creeper.

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Re: Heavenly Blue

#3 Post by Kenneth2816 » 13 Oct 2020, 22:55

Gentle. Very enjoyable, what poetry should be.

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Re: Heavenly Blue

#4 Post by Billy » 13 Oct 2020, 23:11

Thanks Siva, Ken

Siva, heavenly blue is the common name of a certain morning glory. It’s seeds are hallucinogenic like LSD, which is not important to the poem.

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Re: Heavenly Blue

#5 Post by BobBradshaw » 13 Oct 2020, 23:53

Just lovely. From the opening to its end....kudos

Sparrows, like children,
hop and play, minor
squabbles settled
with sharp retorts,

through

I watch the ascent
as if it's yesterday
becoming the future.
A multitude of newborn
flowers grab their chance
at tender light.
A choir in royal blue robes
silenced at noon.

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Re: Heavenly Blue

#6 Post by Billy » 15 Oct 2020, 07:33

Thanks Bob, may try another one like this.

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Re: Heavenly Blue

#7 Post by Billy » 15 Oct 2020, 17:53

I decided that the last line had to be “heavenly blue/robes”. Royal blue is quite different from heavenly blue, and I think it works as the title is a little mysterious until later on.

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