The Way Of Coyote

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Billy
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The Way Of Coyote

#1 Post by Billy » 03 Dec 2020, 05:13

The Way Of Coyote

He lopes through the marsh
to the edge of a neighborhood,
crosses an open field of stubble
like an illegal immigrant, tail

down, head low, sweeping side
to side, wary, halting and crouching
at any noise. Middle of the day,
a daring venture for what purpose?

New territory where he's not known,
has no reputation, yet. How many
times have I attempted to start anew,
leaving the booze and pipes behind.

No cool to live up to. No so-called
friends knockin' at my door. Alone.
Walkin' on the curb, hands in pockets,
looking away when I feel them looking.

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Re: In The Way Of The Coyote

#2 Post by BobBradshaw » 03 Dec 2020, 05:28

This is so good! I love the analogy being drawn between coyote and the narrator. Great last line.

Looking away when I felt them looking.

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Re: The Way Of Coyote

#3 Post by Billy » 03 Dec 2020, 20:07

Thank you, Bob, poem of the decade guy.

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#4 Post by RamanathanSiva » 05 Dec 2020, 22:00

Very neat and structured poem Billy. Cannot think of anything that is not appropriate.

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#5 Post by Billy » 06 Dec 2020, 07:41

Thanks Siva

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#6 Post by meenas17 » 07 Dec 2020, 21:11

Billy,
I like the way you draw the analogy.
It is well crafted.
meenas17

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Re: The Way Of Coyote

#7 Post by Billy » 01 Jan 2021, 21:28

Bob, Siva, Meena

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